1、左右手互博练出30分作文,博智教育 王文静,资料清单,28-30分考生的培训前后作文对比+教师精批 来自北美考场的托福满分大作文集 小作文1-26满分范文 大作文模版 大作文sample三篇仅供思路参考 下载地址：见讲座公告区,Agenda,不同分数目标的不同战略 想清楚才能写清楚满分作文之逻辑清楚 词不在难，会用则灵满分作文之语言合体 资料使用讲解,互动时间规则,3个指定的互动环节非互动环节老师会关闭对话窗口,托福作文学习之困境,从来不写的 一写就几十篇的 扒别人高分作文模版的 自己觉得自己写的挺好就是冲不破25的,不会举例的 只会举例的 GMAT后遗症 GRE后遗症 四级六级后遗症,如果你
2、只要20分,勇敢地拥抱模版吧！The issue of _(名词性成分)_has triggered wild controversies lately in my community. The debate sometimes became acrimonious, as some hold that _ _ while the others insist on the opposite. Some efforts trying to find a mitigating middle ground failed miserably. Based on my own experience on
3、 the issue, I argue that _ _.,若你心怀满分壮志,Effectively addresses the topic and task展开论点 Is well organized and well developed, using clearly appropriate explanations, exemplifications, and/or details结构,若你心怀满分壮志,Displays unity, progression and coherence结构 Displays consistent facility in the use of languag
4、e, demonstrating syntactic variety, appropriate word choice, and idomaticity, though it may have minor lexical or grammatical errors 语言运用,训练阶段和冲刺阶段的区分,训练要慢慢才会发生质变 冲刺阶段要放下集中优势炮火,训练阶段,打磨逻辑 积累语言 完善结构,满分作文之逻辑清楚,2013.01.13 Do you think your should make sure others (your leader or colleagues) know your st
5、rength and accomplishment, because it is the only way to be successful? 让题目飞一会儿,想一想的成果,没有无用的联想意识流也是有用的,巧用联想写开头,开头段的作用 交代题目背景 帮助读者理解，你的立场的背景由来 为后段论述铺垫搭台 为攻击性强的论证树立靶子 定义理解可能有不同的核心概念,交代和个人相关的历史背景式开头,Topic： Do you agree with the viewpoint that people are now easier to become educated than in the past? M
6、y grandfather once told me that when he was a student he had to walk almost 3miles a day to get to the school and teachers and books are the only two accessible educational resource at that time. However, in this modern age, the advanced technology penetrates in every aspect of our lives and change
7、the way of traditional education. In addition, the resource of education is abundant and people have the incentive to have education. (Before I have further discussion, I think it is necessary to define the term “easy to become educated”.,小矫情一下的开头,Do you agree or disagree with the following statemen
8、t: It is more important to choose friends with whom you can have fun than to choose friends who will help when you need them? Everyone would agree that, without friends, no individual could live in this world; even the pathetic Robinson Crusoe, he still got Friday as his company on the lonely island
9、. However, on the standards of choosing friends, there is no general agreement. Some prefer those with whom they could have more fun to those who will help when they get into trouble. While as it for me, I just view it on the contrary.,例子开头,Topic: Successful people try new things and take risks rath
10、er than only doing what they already know how to do well. My uncle started (to do the business of exporting) his own export business when most of us didnt realize (the potential benefits of it) its potential profits. 【改掉前面这两个地方主要是为了体现语言的简洁性】. However, after several years, he succeeded in earning lar
11、ge amount of money and afforded to buy his own apartment in Shanghai. (From this case)Judging from multiple success stories like this around me, 【不要让自己的论点是从一件单一的事情而来的，非常偏激】I am leaning toward trying new things in order to succeed.,交代话题的社会背景,Many people have learned a foreign language in their own co
12、untry, others have learned a foreign language in the country in which it is spoken. Which is better? Give the advantages of each and support your viewpoint. Given the difficult situation of job-hunting in China nowadays, more and more people seek to learn a foreign language to improve themselves and
13、 add more opportunities of finding a good job. Among them, many choose to learn it in their own country while others tend to go abroad to the native speakers country. Both ways can help you master a foreign language.,分论点的构建,分论点要对主论点有合理的，比较强的支撑关系 分论点之间不能重复从不同的维度去切入,满分作文之逻辑清楚,2013.01.13 Do you think y
14、our should make sure others (your leader or colleagues) know your strength and accomplishment, because it is the only way to be successful?,让别人知道自己的长处，才能够进入自己擅长的领域，获得【机会】让别人知道自己的长处，才能博得相应的待遇企业会为更能产出的人付出更高的价钱【钱】让别人知道自己的优点，有助于形成自我满足感，得到认可，获得心情愉悦 【心情】,例子的唯一功能是例证论证,让别人知道自己的长处，才能够进入自己擅长的领域，获得【机会】让别人知道自己的
15、长处，才能博得相应的待遇企业会为更能产出的人付出更高的价钱【钱】让别人知道自己的优点，有助于形成自我满足感，得到认可，获得心情愉悦 【心情】,开头,It looks like an odd topic at first thought. What kind of people will deliberately hide their strengths and accomplishments? Isnt it taken for granted that we always let people know what we are good at? Giving it a little more
16、 thought, however, you realize not a lot of people are good at marketing their strengths and accomplishments. It is either that they are shy, or that they dont think it is worth boasting about, or that they assume other people should know their strengths simply by hanging around them. But thats not
17、true. Without our own deliberate effort, often our merits go unnoticed. We should all do better on marketing ourselves because it is essential to a successful life. A successful life often entails doing what we are good at and what we like, living a comfortable life, and feeling good about ourselves
18、 most of the time. Advocating our strengths and accomplishments can help us achieve all these goals quickly.,分论点1,First, it can help us get into works that we like and we are good at. Opportunities are always rare to come by. To make things worse, those in charge of talent selection or job staffing
19、are not always the most informed about whos the best candidate. The reason is simple, no one knows the person more than the person himself. If the decision maker is provided with information on the candidates strengths and weaknesses from the candidates themselves, he will be able to make good decis
20、ions that benefit not only the work and also the person selected. My company has a programmer called Bob, who often goes around commenting on the graphic designers work. He even jumped in to help design a few webpages. Knowing his passion and strengths in webpage design, our manager asked him to des
21、ign and program the new learning management system. Bob become a one-person design and development center because he advocated his strength.,分论点2,And we never leave out money when talking about success. Telling other people your strengths and achievements has a direct link to your paycheck. Think ab
22、out itcompanies are always willing to pay for real talents. And the bigger a company is, the more it emphasizes the importance of human capital. In the work place there are usually two ways to get a raise: bump up your performance evaluation scores or simply get a job offer elsewhere. You cannot ach
23、ieve either of these without selling hard to people what you are good at and what you have achieved. The rule of thumb is to do good work and make sure your manager knows about it, so you will get promotions and bonuses to guarantee a comfortable life for you and your family.,分论点3,Of course, money i
24、s not all when it comes to success. We also want to feel good about ourselvesultimately every measure of success counts into this subjective feeling. To feel good about ourselves and what we have done, we need to be recognized for what we are good at, what we have achieved, and how great we are. The
25、 source of this good feeling lies in other peoples judgments, but we are in charge of feeding them the necessary information to make judgments in our favor. Even a small kid in kindergarten knows to show off his smiley face sticker to his parents after behaving well at school, so that his parents wi
26、ll praise him and hug him. Should he have waited for his teacher to write his good behavior in the school report a month later, the recognition wouldnt have come in time to boost his feelings about himself. Obviously it is critical for us to make the other people know our merits if we want to feel g
27、ood about ourselves.,结尾,So what are you still waiting on? Go up to your boss, or your parents, or your significant other, and tell them what great things you have done lately.,词不在难，会用则灵语言篇,来自北美考场的满分作文 博智学员经过成绩验证的高分作文样本 如果你只会用effective，就要补充词汇啦！,把你会的词用起来！,45. tentative adj. 暂时的，尝试性的，犹豫的， 【例】The tentat
28、ive plan is to put some endangered species in protective zones. 暂定的计划是把濒危物种放到保护区里去。His first few steps in the dance pool were tentative, but soon he picked up the steps confidently. 他下舞池的头几步犹豫着试探，但很快就自信地跟上了。 【TinaTwina说】这个词的发音，好像“探探的”，带有试探的意味。这个词的近义词是provisional， 属于少见词汇，就不要求大家掌握了。,temperate adj. 温和的
29、，适度的 【例】He is a temperate man。他是一个性格温和的男人（好像安妮宝贝和张悦然的文字哦）。The temperate weather in San Francisco coupled with the high-tech industries at the silicon valley attracts many young intellectuals to the area. 旧金山温和的气候，加上硅谷的高科技行业，吸引了很多聪明的年轻人。 【TinaTwina说】我们学过各种程度形容好的和坏的词，偏偏中间适度这里是个真空。它的中文释义比较忠实，就是温和。近义词是m
30、oderate， 如果你一定要逼着我做词义辨析，那么moderate是没有任何过激过度的那种温和；而temperate则有刻意节制的痕迹，辨析完了是不是更糊涂了？对付着用吧，两个词互换问题不大。,51. mitigate v. 镇静，缓和，平息mediate 【例】The government should set up emergency funds to mitigate effects of disasters. 政府应该设应急基金来缓和灾害的影响。Some drugs are available to mitigate the pain caused by cancer. 有些药可以用
31、来缓解癌症带来的疼痛。 【TinaTwina说】这个词表达的意思是疼痛受不了的时候一双温柔的手轻轻抚过，让你得到片刻的缓和的意思，仅限于缓和，要真正解决问题，它还远做不到。我们常常和另外一个词记混了，就是mediate。Mediate是居中调和调解的意思，He is trying to mediate between the company and the striking workers（他在调解工厂方和罢工的工人方）。,句式变换,要求掌握： 从句（主语从句，状语从句，定语从句） 倒装句 虚拟语气句 省略句 长短句结合,课上提到的教材,博智各地分校有售 淘宝博智官方网店： http:/,联系
32、方法: TinaTwina 新浪微博,晒书时间,推荐购书,升级版,学员作文的前世,I disagree that people can benefit more from travelling in their own country than from travelling to foreign countries, because I believe that people can gain more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. People can improv
33、e their foreign language use from traveling to foreign countries. People will automatically practice their foreign language skills while traveling to foreign countries, because they have to listen to foreign language, speak with foreign language and read in foreign language during their trip in fore
34、ign country. However, People will lose the opportunity to practice their foreign language use if they travee in their own countries since they only need to use their mother language while travelling in their own countries.,学员作文的前世,In addition, people can adopt new culture experience from traveling t
35、o foreign countries. People will gain many different culture experiences when traveling to foreign countries. Instead of knowing from the newspaper or TV, travelling to foreign countries will allow people directly experience foreign cultures by themselves, so they will see how foreign people work an
36、d live for their life. If people travel in their own countries, they will lose the opportunity to experience different cultures from the foreign countries. I believe that people can benefit more from travelling to foreign countries than travelling in their own countries because people improve their
37、foreign language use and gain more culture experience.,今生,“Never, never give up”, as one the most well known speech of Churchill, has inspired so many depressed Britain and led them to victory in the World War II. Not only Britain people but also I was encouraged by the speech. The statement of “nev
38、er, never give up” sounds simple, but it shows you a strong life faith. I believe that “keep trying” will help people reach their goals.,今生,The statement of “never, never give up” provides inner power to people. It encourages people to concentrate their minds and energy fully on the actual work rath
39、er than on the negative mentality such as self-doubt caused by all kinds of occupational difficulty. When people struggle with the tough tasks, the statement provides them a faith to deal with tough tasks and goals, and most of them succeed because of their strong mental power. The famous successful
40、 coach Tony believes “psychology is 80% of success”. Without any doubt, the struggling of give up or not cannot provide people with any assistance to overcome the difficulty but just demotivate people and waste their energy.,今生,Moreover, once people get fully involved in the work, people can engage
41、and use their subconscious on their work. My friend Bob wanted to improve his TOEFL speaking grade from 12 to 20 above in one month. It sounded like miracle to Bob, since his speaking was very bad. However, he never worried his goal and just kept practicing. One night, to his wifes surprise, Bob was
42、 speaking English in his dream. One month later, Bob did improve his TOEFL speaking grade to 23. Regarding to Bobs success, it was contributed by many factors such as his persistence, studying methods and experienced speaking tutor. However, the primary key factor was due to his 100% participation i
43、n his goal.,今生,Some people disagree with the statement “never, never up” and they believe that people should give up their goals if the goals are unrealistic. However, I disagree. If Wright Brothers set “realistic” goals, there would no plane today. If Thomas Edison set the realistic goals on his invention, people might still live in the dark with candles. If the goals have to be realistic, the world would very boring. Therefore, realistic should be not the excuse for people quit their goals. Instead, people should never, never give up but keep working and trying for their goals.,
