1、雅思九分作文篇一：雅思大作文：考官眼中的 9 分范文雅思大作文：考官眼中的 9 分范文我惊喜的发现我教了十年雅思，居然碰到了难得一见的 9 分文章，我给了几位前任的 IELTS Examiner 打了分数，都给出了 9分。我们来欣赏一下：Globalization is a declaration of war upon all other cultures. And in culture wars, there is no exemption of civilians, there are no innocent bystanders. Why should it be expected t
2、hat ancient and rooted civilizations are going to accept this peripheralisation without a struggle? The answer to that is thatglobalization carries an implicit promise that it will relieve poverty and offer securityperhaps the most ancient of human dreams. Because of the power of global capitalism t
3、o create wealth, it is assumed that this priority must sweep aside all other human preoccupations, including all existing institutions, interpretations and searches for meaning in the world.It is disingenuous to assume that economy, society and culture operate in separate spheres. This suggests that
4、, one, exposed to the globalizingimperative, no aspect of social life, customary practice, traditional behaviour will remain the same.There have been, broadly, two principal responses in the world, which we may call the fatalistic and the resistant. It is significant that among the most fatalistic h
5、ave been the leaders of G-7, Ex-President Clinton said globalization is a fact not a policy choice Tony Blair said it is inevitable and irreversible. It may be considered paradoxical that the leaders of the most dynamic andexpanding economies in the world offer such a passive, unchallenging view of
6、what are, after all, human-made arrangements. These are among the richest and most proactive regimes, which can wage endless war on the greatabstraction, that is terror, topple regimes and lay down one WTO law for the poor and another for themselves. Is their helplessness in the presence of these mi
7、ghty economic and cultural powers?There are two aspects to resistance. One is the reassertion of local identitieseven if local actually means spread over very large parts of theworld. The reclaiming of the local is often focused in the field of culturemusic, songs and dance. This suggests an attempt
8、 to guarantee it from the effects of economic integration; a kind of cordon sanitaria set up around a dwindling资料来源：教育优选 /retype/zoom/483665b05a8102d276a22fd6?pn=1s success cannot be measured strictly by money.Material possession has been traditionally accepted as the measurement of ones success or
9、social status. When we initially refer to someone, we routinely mention how much money he owns and thereby believe this individual to be quite successful if he is wealthy. In addition to this perpetuated concept, owning a lot of money is typically related to ones work ability and thus some people ma
10、y simply consider money as a prime measurement of ones success.However, this view has changed recently since many people have come to recognize that money in many cases cannot bring about happiness, health and success. A more precise, contemporaneous definition of success means doing the things one
11、perceives are valuable to themselves and beneficial for others. The winner of the Nobel Prize for peace may think he is has achieved success although he is rewarded little financial benefit. A person who loves animals and makes an effort to save animals that are on a path of extinction may think he
12、has gained success although he may have expended all of his money on his career.Another individual may define success as being able to make artistic masterpieces that can be accepted by public. As a composer, success is having his work praised by adoring fans and who help cause the work to be bought
13、 the world over. Similarly, holding an exhibition in a famous art gallery may connote success for a painter.People adhere to various concepts defining success. Money surely cannot be the only measurement of success. Acquiring true happiness in life and attaining success means having the freedom and
14、capability of doing that which you enjoy and believing it to be valuable.-Computers - will they replace teachers?With the present wide use of computers, in the course of teaching, more and more teachers are in favour of using computers as an aid in teaching their students or in appropriating the lat
15、est information from the Internet. However, I am not a believer in the argument that computers may in the future take the place of teachers in teaching students.Firstly, the creators of any education program and software need to be teachers or workers in the education system, or programmers who had
16、previously worked in education. Therefore, although students may learn knowledge by computer, the skills and ideas ultimately emanate from the teaching staff.Secondly, while the computer may offer a correct answer or explanation to students, the comprehension capability of every student varies from
17、student to student, making it is impossible for the computer to offer an explanation catered to a students particular level of understanding. However, the teacher is able to undertake this task, as he or she possesses expertise in teaching. For example, when a teacher discovers that many students ca
18、nnot understand professional knowledge, he or she may offer explanatory examples. The computer, however, may only analyze a question in terms of a simple right or wrong response.Finally, the teachers are invariably responsible for carrying a dual role. Most teachers act as not only an educator, but
19、also a kind of father or mother-figure in taking care of students in school. The teacher is able to assist parents in solving a childs mental problems other than imparting daily knowledge. The computer, which is purely an algorithmic electronic device, cannot hope to assist in this regard. In summar
20、y, the computer may not play a major role in education in comparison to the benefits of a teacher bestows. However, it is critical that teachers improve their old teaching modes by using computers at some level of educational teaching.-Nature or Nurture?While many individuals complain that they are
21、not sufficiently clever to succeed in life, I firmly believe that personality and development are decided more by education and training after birth than any given gene.To begin with, environment is a determining factor of ones personality. One may think that personality is already shaped once a bab
22、y is born, but in fact there are many contributing factors. The baby, for instance, would most likely be pessimistic if he or she lived in a poor family, where the baby always received punishment from his parents. His view of life would be very different from another individual who lived happily in
23、a perfect nurturing family with encouragement and psychological support from his parents.Further, education after birth plays a significantly role in ones development. Education, which helps children develop their thinking and accumulate their knowledge, is a deciding factor of ones success. For exa
24、mple, a high-school level person commonly may not to the extent of a person who has received an university education. This is not only because of the greater breadth of knowledge acquired, but also due to a more critical and focused way of thinking that is imparted and refined during ones senior edu
25、cation. A wolf child, to offer another instance, due to a deficiency of education by contact with human beings, could hardly live in our society or self-develop.Admittedly, nature, decided by the genes given by ones parents, also affects ones personality and development. One can clearly find differe
26、nces among younger kids in their learning ability, which could prove the importance of genes in this regard. However, when compared with other factors after birth, the role genes play in ones personality and development may not be particularly significant. Not all genius will inevitably be successfu
27、l, and similarly not all great men are genius in their childhood. Therefore, I hold that environment and education after birth weigh heavier than nature in regard to ones personality and development.-Compete or cooperate?Both competition and cooperation play a large role in the advancement of societ
28、y, both in business and non-business areas. Competition forces people to improve their products or services, and hence benefits the recipients of these products or services. Cooperation, however, plays an even more important role in development of individuals and the society as a whole, because it d
29、rastically increases the scale of these improvements. Working in groups and teams far increases the productivity of individuals. Thus, I firmly believe children should be taught to cooperate rather than to compete.First of all, cooperation is an important skill in the future life of all children. Th
30、ey will need to live with other people throughout their life, since they will not study alone, work alone, nor spend their leisure time alone. If they do not know how to cooperate with their classmates, their colleagues, and other family members, then they will lose the chance to live happily. Thus,
31、 cooperation skills should be taught before they grow up to face serious problems living with others.Furthermore, cooperation is a significant contributing factor to the development of society. While competition generally ends in a win-lose result, cooperation advocates that one plus one is larger t
32、han two, three or even a larger number. For example, the competition of two business firms would ultimately lead to the result that one becomes stronger and the other fails and goes out of business. However, if they cooperate with each other successfully, they may group together to form an enterpris
33、e larger than the mere sum of the two. The more successful cooperation there is, the better the society develops. Thus, cooperation should be taught to children, because eventually they will be the executives of important corporations.Admittedly, competition also plays a significant role in many are
34、as. Stressed by the competition, individuals and organizations have to struggle to survive, and so they are forced to make improvements and develop.However, in comparison, cooperation is more effective in helping individuals and societies to develop, because it benefits not only individuals, but als
35、o society as a whole. The reality is that children should be taught both, but if forced to choose only one, parents should undoubtedly teach their kids to cooperate rather than to compete篇三：雅思范文：考官 9 分雅思大作文模板雅思范文：考官 9 分雅思大作文模板编者按：这是一篇新鲜出炉的考官 simon9 分雅思大作文。以小编几十篇 simon 作文的阅读量，大致总结了他最为习惯的行文结构，通过对这个考官所
36、喜欢的 9 分“模板”的解读，希望大家能在自己的雅思写作备考中，对写作模板的使用能有一个新的认识。IELTS Writing Task 2: positive or negative essayHeres my full essay for the positive or negative development question that weve been looking at over the last few weeks.In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the
37、 past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?9 分范文：In recent years it has become far more normal for people to live alone, particularly in large cities in the developed world. In my opinion, this trend is having both positive and negative consequences in equal measure.The rise in o
38、ne-person households can be seen as positive for both personal and broader economic reasons. On an individual level, people who choose to live alone may become more independent and self-reliant than those who live with family members. A young adult who lives alone, for example, will need to learn to
39、 cook, clean, pay bills and manage his or her budget, all of which are valuable life skills. From an economic perspective, the trend towards living alone will result in greater demand for housing. This is likely to benefit the construction industry, estate agents and a whole host of other companies
40、that rely on homeowners to buy their products or services.However, the personal and economic arguments given above can be considered from the opposite angle. Firstly, rather than the positive feeling of increased independence, people who live alone may experience feelings of loneliness, isolation an
41、d worry. They miss out on the emotional support and daily conversation that family or flatmates can provide, and they must bear the weight of all household bills and responsibilities. Secondly, from the financial point of view, a rise in demand for housing is likely to push up property prices and re
42、nts. While this may benefit some businesses, the general population, including those who live alone, will be faced with rising living costs.In conclusion, the increase in one-person households will have both beneficial and detrimental effects on individuals and on the economy.(280 words, band 9)【 思路
43、分析】四段 13 句式1.导入段 2 句(背景+ 观点)2.主体段 1 5 句( 观点+论据 1+例子+论据 2+支持句)3.主题段 2 5 句(观点 +论据 1+支持句+论据 2+支持句)4.结论段 1 句 观点重申【 模板解读】这是 simon 自己所最为擅长的雅思大作文四段13 句式行文结构。几乎所有的大作文，均可以采用此结构完成。稍加变动的只是在主体段中的论据，支持二者的比重。一般来说，注意 2 个主体段中适时地加入 1 个例子即可。所以对于一个主体段 5 句式，根据论据是 2 个还是 3 个(一般不允许 1 个，否则论证过于单薄 )simon 常常采取的方式是这样的：方式 1：观点+
44、3 个论据+1 个支持句或例子(支持句或例子根据需要放置)方式 2：观点+2 个论据+1 个支持句+1 个例子小结：模板是可以用的，但这个模板指的是自己所擅长的一个总的文章结构，而不是具体的死板的句式结构。在这种擅长的结构中，加入自己对于 topic 的有见地的观点和论证过程，结果如上所示：280 words, band 9。【 文章解读】具体到文章内部，既平淡无奇，却又暗藏沟壑。第一段的观点句 this trend is having both positive and negative consequences in equal measure第二段 one-person househol
45、ds 的同义转述，on an individual level 和 From an economic perspective 两个层面的论述。learn to cook, clean, pay bills and manage his or her budget 多动词形成的一种强大的表现力。第三段观点句 the personal and economic arguments given above can be considered from the opposite angle 此种方式的观点句非常少见。作者为我们展示了对一个观点持完全中立态度的方法。从首段开始的 in equal measure 到此处的 can be considered from the opposite angle。第四段总结 have both beneficial and detrimental effects on individuals and on the economy。以上即是小站雅思频道为大家带来的 9 分雅思范文解读的全部内容。范文原载于 simon 博客。祝早日雅思写作学有所成，祝早日与雅思分手。雅思范文：考官 9 分雅思作文模板
