1、高考专题复习:写作 ( 六 ),高考写作之人物介绍,1. 性别与婚姻（Sex & Marriage）Im a man of forty and have a 9-year-old daughter.She got married in 1980 and now she has been married for more than 20 years.I m 35 ,male and unmarried.I got married five years ago but now Im single.,By the age of 14, he had set up a chemistry lab of
2、 his own.,他出生在1995年,现在10岁了. 2.他985年出生,今年18岁,是一名大学生.3.在14岁时候,他开始自己谋生.4.在他50岁时,他感到自己老了.5.到他14岁的时候,他已经建立了他自己的化学实验室.,He was born in 1995 and is ten years old now.,Born in 1985,he is now an 18-year-old student, studying in a university.,He began to make a living at the age of 14 /at an early age.,In his
3、fifties, he began to feel his age .,2.年龄（Age）,He is a tall man, with blue eyes and blond hair.,1.她是一个圆脸,大眼睛,皓齿长发的可爱的女孩.2.他又瘦又高戴着一副深度近视镜.3.他是一个很好看的男人,留着浓密的小胡子但是却没有头发.4.他是一个高个子男人,有着蓝眼睛黄头发.,She is a lovely girl, with a round face, big eyes, white teeth and long waving hair.,He is thin, tall and wearing
4、 a pair of thick glasses.,He is a good-looking/funny-looking man, with athick moustache but no hair left.,3.外貌特征（Appearance）,deep-set eyes ,big bright eyes, long straight nose,brown curling hair, broad shoulders,4.身高（Height）He is 1.76 meters tall.He is 176 centimeters tall.He is 176 centimeters in h
5、eight.The boy is not tall enough to reach the apple overhead.He is really a tall man, about 1.98 meters in height.My height is 1.76 metres .(不合英语习惯)Im 1.76 meters high.（身高不宜用high）,5.健康状况（Health）1)由于被照顾的很好,孩子们看上去很健康.2)我身体不强壮,但是很健康.3)住了六周的院,现在她看上去很虚弱.,Well looked after, the children look healthy.,Im n
6、ot so strong, but (Im) in good health.,Having been in hospital for six months, now she looks very weak.,6.教育状况（Education） 我1984年入学12年后毕业.1984年我进入北京大学,4年后毕业.我们学很多课程,包括我已经在天山小学上了2年多了,下学期就毕业了.1998年4月我获得了数学学士学位.,I started school in 1984 and left school 12 years later.,I went to study in Beijing Universi
7、ty in 1984 and 4 years later I graduated (from that university).,We learned many courses, including,Ive been studying in Tianshan Primary School (No.1 High School, Fudan University) for more than two years and will graduate next semester.,I got my bachelors (masters, doctors) degreein mathematics in
8、 April 1998.,7.特长爱好（Specialty & Hobbies） 我很擅长口语,计算机是我的强项.我在去年的英语演讲竞赛中获得了第一名.他在网叶设计大赛中获得了第一名.我最喜欢的运动是游泳和打乒乓.在我的业余时间里,我喜欢读书和旅游.,Im good at spoken English and even better at using computers.,I won the first prize in the English speech contest at school last year.,He got the first place in the homepage
9、designing contest.,My favorite sport is swimming and playing table-tennis.,In my spare time, I like reading and enjoying traveling.,.She gets on well with almost anyone and is always welcome wherever she goes.,写人 1.她是一个12岁的女孩.2. 她又高又苗条大眼睛卷头发.3. 她善良而且乐于助人,随时准备帮助别人.4. 在他的业余时间里她大都听音乐读小说.5.她几乎和每一个人都能很好的
10、相处,无论去哪都受人欢迎.,She is a girl of twelve years old.,She is tall and slim with big eyes and curly hair.,Being kind and helpful she always enjoys helping others out.,In her spare time she spends much time listening to music and reading novels.,8. 详细特色（Something in detail） 举例法（Giving examples）: He was str
11、ict with everybody and in everything he did. One day, we were having classes when He was very forgetful. Once he came across an old friend of his in the street and . He had a strange way of making his classes lively and interesting. I still remember my first day as a chemistry student.,假如你叫王明，是二年级三班
12、的班主任，十七岁的英国留学生玛丽在你班学习，请你根据老师们的评论用英语为其写一段评语，并填写报告书。汉语老师：她对汉语有浓厚的兴趣，而且口语很好。数学老师：她擅长数学，每天做大量的数学练习。化学老师：她喜欢做实验，但有时不够细心。物理老师：物理是她最喜欢的学科，她是班里学得最好的学生之一。班主任：她讲礼貌、乐于助人，与师生相处融洽。2. 词数120左右。Comment:,Mary is a clever girl with good manners. She is always ready to help others and therefore gets along very well wi
13、th her classmates.Having a special interest in Chinese, she speaks it very well. Mary is also good at maths and does a lot of exercises every day. She enjoys doing experiments in chemistry labs ,but sometimes she needs to be more careful. In all the subjects , physics is the most favorite one to her
14、 and she is one of the best in this subject. She always tries her best to make better progress and things better.All the teachers like her very much. Signature: Wang Ming,写作练习李涛是我校年轻的老教师。他被看作是老教师，是因为他教化学课已经有20年了。说他年轻，因为他今年还不过38岁。 他长得较瘦。头上头发不多，灰白了。他戴着深度眼镜，牙齿又缺了2颗。所以他看上去比他实际年龄要大。他说，在公共汽车上常常有人给他让座。事实上。
15、我曾看见他不止一次地给怀抱婴儿的妇女让过座。只要听一听他的化学课那课又生动又有趣，你就会发现他真正的年龄。,A teacherLi Tao is a young teacher in our school. He is regarded as being old for he has been teaching here for 20 years. He is seen, at the same time, as being young as he is now but 38 years old. He doesnt have much hair on the head. And it is
16、nearly all white. Missing two teeth and wearing thick glasses, he looks older than he really is. He says people often offer their seats to him for his old looks. On the contrary, I myself saw him give up his seat to a woman with a baby in her arms. At least twice he did so. When you attend his inter
17、esting and lively classes, you will be sure of his real age -still young.,你是李华,申请到一家外企工作.对方要求你用英语写一篇短文, 介绍自己的基本情况.短文应该包括下表所列全部内容.姓名 李华 出生年月 1977年2月 出生地 辽宁大连学历 1984-1990 年光明小学1990-1996年大连市第六中学所学主要课程 语文、 数学、 英语、物理、 化学、电脑特长 英语、电脑、（去年在全校电脑竞赛中获第一名）业余爱好 游泳、滑冰、集邮、流行音乐,My name is LiHua . I was born in Dalia
18、n, Liaoning province in February 1977. I started school in 1984 when I was seven. I studied in Guangming Primary School from 1984 to 1990. After that I went to No.62 Middle School of Dalian and graduated this summer. The main subjects I studied at school included Chinese, English, physics, chemistry
19、 and computer. I like computer and English best and I am very good at them. Last year, I won first prize in the school computer competition. In my spare time I enjoy listening to popular music and collecting stamps. My favorite sports are swimming in summer and skating in winter.,刘华是我市去年的高考状元，被北京大学录
20、取。假若你是她的好朋友，请你介绍一下她的情况。要点如下： 1.有目标（考取北大）有信心； 2.有周密计划，知道每天干什么； 3.有良好的学习习惯，不拖拉，不开夜车； 4.乐意助人，同学和老师都喜欢她； 5.你从她身上学习了许多东西，对你有很大帮助。 注意事项： 1.要按要点进行写作，根据行文需要，内容可不分先后。 2.不要逐条翻译，根据行文需要可适当增加细节。,Liu Hua, a good friend of mine, is now quite well known because she took the first place in the entrance examination a
21、nd was enrolled by Beijing University last year. I am proud of her and enjoy her success. When she studied in the middle school we often exchanged learning experience, so I know clearly why she was able to achieve such a success. First of all, she had a high goal-going to Beijing University and was
22、full of confidence. She usually had a detailed plan for her study and knew what she should do every day. The most important is that she had a good habit of study and never stayed too late into night or left todays work for tomorrow. She not only studied hard but also was ready to help others. Both t
23、eachers and her classmates liked her very much. I also learned a lot from her, which helped me much, especially with my study. So I believe her goal is my goal, her today is my tomorrow.,应用文写作,组句成文的各种关系的过度词语； 并列and; as well as ; also; 选择or; eitheror; or else; otherwise 原因because ; owing to; due to ;
24、on account of ; 结果so ; therefore ; thus ; as a result 时间when ;soon after ; before; later ; first ; and then ; next ; finally ; afterwards. 比较on the country ; on the other hand ; like 转折but ; yet; however ; although; in spite of ; instead ; 递进besides ; moreover ; even ; in addition 举例for example/inst
25、ance; such as ; that is ; namely ; 总结after all ; in short ; in general ; generally speaking Adverbs,Adverbs,Therefore ; otherwise ; furthermore ; Thus ; finally ; moreover ; namely ; besides ; although ; afterwards ; however ; personally;,Letter writing,信头,信内地址、姓名,称呼,事 由,正 文,结束语,签名,附言、附件,（Enc:/Encl:
26、),结束语Closing,亲人、家属：Yours lovingly ; Yours affectionately 朋友、平辈：Sincerely yours Yours sincerely 上级、长者：Yours respectfully Respectfully yours 单位、部门：Yours sincerely Yours faithfully,书信正面,发信人姓名 发信人地址,收信人性名 收信人地址,邮票,信封背面,发信人姓名 发信人地址,便 条（病/事假条）,June 5th , 2000 Dear Mr. Zhao,I am sorry that I am unable to a
27、ttend school during the following week because of the Sports Meet. The school expects me to play an important part in it . And I will be back to class in a week . I hope you will excuse my absence .(in fact , I take a French leave)Yours respectfullyCharles Encl: the PE Teachers certificate (证明）,通知、通
28、告（NOTICE/ANNOUNCEMENT,口头通知： Ladies and Gentlemen,May I have you attention please?正 文 书面通知：NOTICEIn celebration of May Day , there will be - 正 文School Office April 25th , 2000,,Diary日记,Wednesday May 5th CloudyIt is nearly a month since I began keeping diaries. I find it a very good exercise in Englis
29、h composition.I got back my essay on A Visit to the Park . It was marked with A.There were only three mistakes in it: one in grammar and two in idiom.Im happy to see that I can now express myself in English more usually than ever before. ,作文的评价,怎样才算是一篇好的书面表达呢？ 两个关键: 1)用词造句：尽可能运用比较熟悉的词组、短语或成语；从句式上，力求
30、变换各种句式。,2)行文连贯，运用恰当的连接词,使文章结构严密具有较强的逻辑性。,How to judge the levels of the composition ?,15,评分原则 1 本题总分为15分，按5个档次给分,2 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后 以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。,3 词数少于50或多于100的，从总分中减去1分。,4 评分时，应注意表达内容、所用词汇和语法结构的表述是否 准确、上下文是否连贯及语言表达是否得体。,5 单词拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视 其对表述的影响程度予以考虑。,6 如书写较差，影响表
31、述，将分数降低一个档次。,16,第五档 （1315 分）,完全完成了试题所规定的任务。,应用了正确的语法结构和词汇，没有或有12处错误（为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致）如：拼写、标点、大小写等；具备较强的语言能力。,有效使用了词语间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，达到了预期的写作目的。,17,第四档 （1012 分） 完成了试题所规定的任务。 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，有34处不影响全文意思的错误。 应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容结构紧凑，达到了预期的写作目的。,18,第三档 （79 分） 基本完成了试题所规定的任务。 应用的语法结构和词汇基本能满足任务的要求，有56处错误
32、，但不影响理解。 应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。,19,第二档 （46分） 未恰当完成试题所规定的任务。 语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，错误较多，影响了对写作内容的理解。 较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性，信息未能清楚地传达给读者。,20,第一档 （03分） 未完成试题所规定的任务 有一些和内容要求相关的词汇或短语， 通篇语法结构错误 所写内容与所要求内容无关或无法辨认 空白卷,21,Write a concise passage,use few words expressclear meaning,Tom is four years ol
33、d and he is energetic. One day a bike was given to him. The bike is new and it is a light blue in color. Tom received the bike for his birthday. He struggled to ride his bike. He struggled for two hours. However, he was unsuccessful in riding the bike.,Compare the two passages,Four-year-old Tom is e
34、nergetic. One day, he got a light blue bike for his birthday. He struggled for two hours to ride it, but he was unsuccessful.,Tom is four years old and he is energetic. One day a bike was given to him. The bike is new and it is a light blue in color. Tom received the bike for his birthday. He strugg
35、led to ride his bike. He struggled for two hours. However, he was unsuccessful in riding the bike .,Outstanding,Concise(best),wordy,better,Improve the wordy sentence(I),1. There are many People hunting animals for living in the mountain2.A girl likes Chinese food better. 3. The employee with anger q
36、uarreled with his boss. 4.In the not too far future, our dreams will come true. 5.He gave up school on condition of the reason that it was necessary for him to support his family.,(angry),(prefer),(hunters),(near),(because),Summary one : change phrases into single words,improve the wordy sentence(II
37、),1.His family live in a village which is near a river2.The house, which was newly built is very large.3.People who are interested in the job must send your resume to our company before Friday.4.We will have the party in the garden which is on the top of the main building. 5.While he is waiting for
38、the bus, he always recites texts.,(The newly-built house is very large),(People interested in the job must send your resume to our company before Friday.),(We will have the party in the gardenon the top of the main building.),(While waiting for the bus or Waiting for),(His family live in a village n
39、ear a river),Summary two: Change unnecessary clauses into phrases,improve the wordy part(III),1.A letter was sent by Mrs. Smith. 2.Your luggage will be checked by a custom official and then a pass card will be given to you.3.The gifts should be wrapped up and written a few words of best wishes on by
40、 you.,(Mrs. Smith sent a letter),(A custom official will check your luggage and giveyou a pass card),(You should wrap up the gifts and write a few words of best wishes on them. ),Summary Three: Change useless passive into active,change phrases into single words Change unnecessary clauses into phrase
41、s Change useless passive into active,Summaries:,Improve the following sentence(1),1. Although Chinese is regularly used bystudents, a close and complete study of the subject is seldom taken by them.,(Although students regularly use Chinese, they seldom takea close and complete studyof the subject.),
42、2.I am familiar with the farmers who are planning to attend the meeting which is fixed for next Friday.,Improve the sentence(2),(I am familiar with the farmersplanning to attend the meeting fixed for next Friday),3. The decision that was reached by the committee was to put off the vote.,(The committ
43、ee reached thedecision to put off the vote.) (The committee decided to put off the vote),Improve the sentence(3),Make the passage short and clear,Were so glad you will join in our picnic which will be held in the Peoples Park. Here is how we can be found: After you go into the park, walk on till you
44、 see a river. Cross it and make a turn towards the right. Then a hill will be seen by you. Walk around to the other side of the hill, and a lake will be found by you. We will have our picnic in the small wood which is by the lake. I am sure you will have no trouble in finding us.,Were so glad you wi
45、ll join in our picnic which will be held in the Peoples Park. Here is how we can be found: After you go into the park, walk on till you see a river. Cross it and make a turn towards the right, then a hill will be seen by you. Walk around to the other side of the hill, and a lake will be found by you
46、. We will have our picnic in the small wood which is by the lake. I am sure you will find us without any difficulty.,Have you found it?,Build up a concise passage,Requirements : Write a story about dog. Use the first person: e.g. my parents, my sister 3. Write concisely and clearly. 4. 100 words or
47、so.,状语,I used to have to work even at weekends, doing endless homework and attending classes as well.,2.They put in about the same amount of time listening to music and working on the computer.,状语,3.However ,other students are against the idea ,saying that the Beijing Zoo, built in 1906 ,has a histo
48、ry of 100 years .,4.Chatting on line ,students can more freely express their feelings and opinions.,状语,5. Pointing to a policeman not far away, the young man explained.,6. How glad we were to see the crops and vegetables growing well!,7.Having heard these words, his face went red.,8. Im very sorry t
49、o have made so much noise.,状语,9. When taking examinations, they sometimes cheat in order to get better results to please their parents and teachers.,主语,Charging entrance fees will no doubt keep some people away.,2.Students had a discussion about whether it is necessary to start learning English from childhood.,3. It will be very easy for them to mix Pinyin and English up .,补语,Then I saw a yellow car drive up Third Street and make a right turn into Park Road.,
