1、Continuation Writing 读 后 续 写,对第五档(21-25)作文的描述： 与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落、开头语衔接合理。 内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达； 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑；,Tips for writing:1. Thorough reading 2. Creative plotting（构思） 3. Swift drafting4. Careful polishing5. Neat copying,The present,Reading：,Ste
2、p 1： Thorough Reading,Opening paragraph:They say that blood is thicker than water, that our relatives are more important to us than others. Everyone was so kind to the old lady on her birthday. Surely her daughter would make an even bigger effort to please her?,2. The old lady,1. others,3. her daugh
3、ter,？,Para. 1-51. What did others do to please the old lady? Mrs. MorrisonMrs. GrantJohnnie2. What did the old lady do to celebrate her 80s birthday? What did she expect?,1. Others:Mrs. Morrison:gave the flat an extra cleanbought a card and a bunch of marigoldsMrs. Grant:made a cakeprepared the afte
4、rnoon teaJohnnie:gave a packet of mintsoffered to bring up her presents,2. the old lady:got up early to be ready for the postput on her best dress,Language appreciation: a good way to describe ones mental activities(Para. 4) Two spots of color brightened her cheeks. She was excited like a child. She
5、 would enjoy her day.,She was so eager to get a present.,“A person was very nervous.”,His heart was beating wildly.,He was sweating all over.,she expected：（Para. 6),a present,family affections;love from the daughter;to be rememberedto be connected,3. Myra, the daughter （Para.2-3 )Judging from the in
6、formation in Para. 2-3 about Myra, what kind of person was Myra?,Key words：rare occasionsseldom wrotebusya medal for the aged,2. The old lady,1. others,3. Myra,？,Puzzle:Would Myra please her mother or let her down?,Step 2： Creative plotting,Reminder：Being creative doesnt mean you can write whatever
7、you like. Continuation writing must be designed in a logical and reasonable way. And on top of that being creative will be appreciated.,logic,+,creativity,They say.Everyone kindher daughter.?rare occasionsseldom a medal best clothes excitedMrs. Morrison Mrs. Grant Johnnie. slippercardiganlamp,She st
8、ood by the window, watching. _ _Almost reluctantly (unwillingly)she tore the envelope open._,Would Myra please her mother or let her down?,Myra,？,She stood by the window, watching. _ _Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open. _,Use at least 5 of the following words: please, postman, arrange for
9、, lovely,parcels, write, birthday, presents,Step 3： Swift drafting,Original ending:She stood by the window, watching. The postman turned round the corner on his bicycle. Her heart beat fast. Johnnie had seen him too and ran to the gate. Then clatter, clatter up the stairs. Johnnie knocked at her doo
10、r. “Granny, granny,” he shouted, “Ive got your post. ”He gave her four envelopes. Three were unsealed cards from old friends. The fourth was sealed, in Myras writing. The old lady felt a pang of disappointment. “No parcel, Johnnie?” “No, granny.” Maybe the parcel was too large to come by letter post
11、 .That was it .It would come later by parcel post. She must be patient.,Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open. Folded in the card was a piece of paper. Written on the card was a message under the printed Happy BirthdayBuy yourself something nice with the cheque, Myra and Harold. The cheque f
12、luttered to the floor like a bird with a broken wing. Slowly the old lady stooped to pick it up. Her present, her lovely present. With trembling fingers she tore it into little bits.,Summary:1. What the best continuation articles are likecontent；language2. Suggested procedure for writing;,Tips for w
13、riting:1. Thorough reading： 2. Creative plotting3. Swift drafting4. Careful polishing5. Neat copying,3. A question to ponder:“How to treat our parents”“Listen to your father, who gave you life, and do not look down upon your mother when she is old.”Bible Proverbs 23:22,我的续写思路基于以下几点： 标题是礼物，这个礼物在文章末尾以
14、怎么样的形式出现必然是文章高潮部分； 血浓于水。每个周围的人都对这个老太那么好，这个女儿会做更大的努力让妈妈高兴吗？开篇留下这样的悬念，当然可以是悲剧结尾，也可以是大团圆结局。 老太的女儿的工作跟老年人有关，而因此得到一个奖项，我们可以把此点理解成一种讽刺。也可以为我要写的结局埋下伏笔。,She stood by the window, watching. The postman came as usual. The old ladys heart beat wildly. How she wished for a special present from her daughter! Then
15、 came the knock. There was Johnnie, with several envelopes. No parcels at all! Her heart sank! She scanned the envelopes swiftly, most of which were birthday cards from her lifelong friends. Then she picked out the one from her daughter.Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open. “Dear mum, sorry
16、 to have let you down so many times whether on your birthdays or other occasions. I got a medal for my work for the aged, but I dont think I deserve it. For so long Ive neglected the most lovely aged person in my life, who needs my care and company. I know its time to ” Reading the letter, the old l
17、ady couldnt help but sob. Tears ran down her cheeks and dropped onto the letter. Just at that moment, familiar steps drew closer and without doubt, the old lady knew that her most cherished present was finally coming.,学生作品: 版本1She stood by the window, watching. It seemed as if she had been standing
18、there for a century, there appeared a postman in the distance. The old lady was so excited that her heart faster. Then she heard someone run upstairs and knock at the door，“Granny, its me, Johnnie. Ive got your letter.” “Letter?” The old lady asked, quickly walking towards the door.Almost reluctantl
19、y she tore the envelope open. However, there was only a cheque and a paper lying there, which said, “Mom, Im sorry I cant come to accompany you on your birthday. Buy something you like with the cheque. Happy Birthday.” The poor lady put them back into the envelope, with her hands trembling and tears
20、 running down her cheeks.,学生作品: 版本2 She stood by the window, watching. With time dragging, a postman on the bike showed up. The bell rang. “Finally, my post is coming.” The old lady said to herself excitedly. And Johnnie clapped his hands and said, “Grandma, your daughter must send you a surprise pr
21、esent.” And the old lady smiled like a child. But to her disappointment, the postman only held a letter for her. “No parcels?” she asked with doubt. “No, madam. Have a nice day, bye.”Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open. It was a letter from her busy daughter. “Mom, happy birthday. Here is
22、a ticket. We are too busy to stay with you. You can take the ticket to fly to us. Love, from Myra.” The old lady couldnt help but tremble. She read again and again the letter as if she wanted to eat it up. Eventually, she threw the ticket into the dustbin.,学生作品:版本3She stood by the window, watching.
23、Finally she saw Johnnie coming towards her house. But she could see clearly that there was no parcel in his hand. She felt extremely disappointed. After a while, Johnnie arrived and gave her an envelope. “No parcels. What a pity!” said Johnnie, “but maybe there will a surprise too big to put in a pa
24、rcel.” With these words, he left before the old lady could ask him anything more.Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open. A thin sheet fell down. It was a cheque. She burst into tears. She even felt an urge to tear the cheque into pieces. However, through the mist of her tears, she glanced at
25、several sentences on the other side of the cheque, saying, “Mom, you knew I had got a medal. But I dont know whether I deserve it. So I decide to visit you on your birthday. Just wait for me.” Once again she stood by the window, watching. This time, she was waiting for her daughter. Two spots color
26、brightened her cheeks.,Kates risky journey: In wind and rain she started on her difficult way. (情境描写) The storm had not washed this away, but there was no footpath across it. (场景描写) With great care she began the dangerous crossing, sometimes on her hands and knees, hardly daring to look down between
27、 the sleepers into the wild flood waters below. If she should slip, she would fall between the sleepers, into the rapidly flowing stream. (动作描写+心理描写+情境描写),平时如何积累语言表达：201610浙江A篇：,话题语言：,话题语言：,The urgent situation: Suddenly another thought went through Kates mind like an electric shock. (副词运用+修辞比喻) If
28、it were not stopped, that long train, full of passengers, would fall into the stream. (虚拟语气) But there was no time to rest. She still had to run more than half a mile and had only a few minutes left. (时空描述) Unless she reached the station before the express did, many, many lives would be lost. (关联句式+
29、语词重复) She did reach the station just as the train came into sight. (动词强调+副词强调) “The bridge is down! Stop the train! Oh, please stop it!” Kate shouted breathlessly. (语气句式+动作描写) The station-master went pale. (外貌描写),2016-10浙江高考阅读理解A篇,小词（副词）巧用： I strongly suggest that I firmly believe that I sincerely h
30、ope that I fully support that As is vividly shown in the picture that have a profound effect on take effective measures to make a big difference to play a vital role in,Im terribly sorry that I lost your book accidentally.,多种变式恰当的句式、用词： 恰当的形容或副词：obviously, clearly, apparently, undoubtedly, similarly
31、, (un)luckily, (un)fortunately, pitifully, sadly, surprisingly, accordingly, currently, personally, seemingly/apparently, absolutely, extremely, steadily, consequently, briefly, actually, completely/entirely等 评注性状语：to be honest, to be frank, to be short, generally speaking, in a way, in some degree
32、省略句：conj. + doing或done /conj. + adj. 强调句： 倒装句：（句中有介词短语或状语从句） with引导的独立主格结构 非谓语动词 使用被动句: eg. It is generally believed that mutual understanding contributes to a permanent friendship. 使用感叹句: eg. How terrible I felt today! I failed again in the test. 使用插入语、同位语 使用what引导的名词性从句 使用虚拟语气 使用复合句（形成长短之变、节奏之美） 使
33、用谚语、习语 使用特殊句式,如要表示“使”，不要仅依靠make:,a) This society still makes women unable to enjoy equal rights. b) Women are still denied equal rights. a) The incident made me recall one of my past experiences. b) The incident reminded me of one of my past experiences.,如要表达“越来越”，不要只使用more and more:,a) More and mor
34、e students find learning English has become more and more difficult. b) Students in growing numbers find learning English has become increasingly difficult. a) More and more teenagers smoke cigarettes in recent years. b) Teenage smoking is on the rise in recent years. a) More and more teachers are d
35、emanded with the development of economy. b) There is an increasing demand for teachers with the development of economy.,如要表达“大多数”，不要一味用most:,a) Most students take a part-time job after class. b) The vast majority of students take a part-time job after class.a) Most people take part in sports of diff
36、erent kinds. b) The considerable proportion of people take part in sports of different kinds.a) Most college students take a negative attitude towards smoking. b) The large percentage of college population take a negative attitude towards smoking.,改变语态,a) Many people think birth control is quite nec
37、essary in China.It is widely (commonly) thought /believed /held /(accepted) that birth control is quite necessary in China.b) He has made rapid progress in English.Rapid progress has been made in English.c) We should make great efforts to prevent the environment from being destroyed.Great efforts sh
38、ould be made to prevent the environment from being destroyed.,学会用名词结构来表达意思,The style of living has become more and more popular and accepted by more and more young people. The style of living has found its growing popularity and acceptance among young people. If we dont recognize the serious problem
39、 of growing population, we will make a big mistake. Failure to recognize the seriousness of growing population will lead to a big mistake. If we are watching too much TV, our reading ability will be seriously affected. Heavy exposure to TV will have a negative effect on our reading ability.,While th
40、ey were playing tennis, she started an argument that lasted all morning.,During tennis, she started an argument lasting all morning.,The novel, which is written in three parts, tells a story that is set in the Middle Age.,Written in three parts, the novel tells a story set in the Middle Age .,用不同表述方
41、式替代从句 （介词短语、分词形式、前置形容词等）,A neighbor who would like to help others gets certain help in return.,A helpful neighbor often receives help form others in return.,We sometimes make choices that put our lives in danger where death can occur.,College students who do not have enough financial backing can app
42、ly needs-based scholarship.,We sometimes make choices that put our life in risk.,College students lacking enough financial backing can apply needs-based scholarship,转折词的替换： The children at school were familiar with games, but Li Hua had never even heard of them.,The silence of the room was broken by
43、 a sudden clap of thunder outside.,The children at school were familiar with games that Li Hua had never even heard of .,The room was silent, but suddenly there was a clap of thunder outside.,灵活使用句式，关注表述的多样性,not only but also的替换： In his spare time, he not only loves surfing, but also web-surfing.,In
44、 his spare time, he is a surfer of both waves and the internet.,In his spare time, he loves not only surfing but also web-surfing.,灵活使用句式，关注表述的多样性,用名词短语或动名词短语做主语替换if 从句,If we want to end a war quickly, we must lose it.,Failure to pass the drug test will result in your job dismissal.,The quick way to
45、 end a war is to lose it.,灵活使用句式，关注表述的多样性,If you live honestly, eat slowly and lie about your age, you can keep your youth forever.,Living honestly, eating slowly and lying about your age can keep your youth forever.,If words are taken out of context, they are not very likely to mean the same as the
46、y do when they are in context.,If you fail to pass the drug test, we will have to dismiss you from your job.,Words taken out of context do not always mean what they do in context.,We decided to take a taxi because we missed the bus by a second.,Because my schedule was so busy, I was not able to atte
47、nd Susans wedding.,Missing the bus by a second, we decided to take a taxi.,My busy schedule didnt allow me to attend Susans wedding.,灵活使用句式，关注表述的多样性,用多样表述替换because 从句,用多样表述替换there be从句1. There are 17 men who volunteered.,2. There is no denial that everyone will eventually die. There is no exception.
48、,17 men volunteered.,Death spares no one.,3. There were many mule deer throughout North America, but they are now almost extinct.,Mule deer, once common throughout North America, are now almost extinct.,灵活使用句式，关注表述的多样性,读后续写评分原则：评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：1.与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；2.内容的丰富性和
49、对所标出关键词语的应用情况；3.应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；4.上下文的连贯性。,201610首次考试评分（专家语）： 1.评分时优先考虑考生的语言水平：先根据语言水平确定档次，然后再综合考虑内容与情节、组织与逻辑思维等其他方面。 2.相关评阅中的困惑只要考试说明中未作规定，都是写作的创意、开放空间，可被接受，如： 续写时下划线词语可否集中在一段？有没有下划线单词的分布要求？ 下划线单词如果是名词，续写时可否进行单复数的变化？ 续写时可否创造或介入前文没有出现过的其他人物？,关键要素：语言（语言优先原则）+思维,明确读后续写的评价标准,关注一：有无把握主题？事件的走向及最终结局有无偏离作者的写作意图或主题意蕴、思想情感或人生哲理？事件的发展有无凸显主题，体现正确的价值导向，展现对真、善、美的思考与追求？,
