1、大学英语四级写作 College English Writing -CET 4-,西安工业大学北方信息工程学院魏 明,课程目标：本课程专为有一定英语基础，并希望通过大学英语四级考试的同学们开设。以培养同学们较强的写作能力，使同学们能以英语为工具，获取专业所需要的信息，进一步提高英语水平，打下较好的基础为目的。通过这一课程的学习，期望同学们能在写作方面有所提高，掌握良好的英语学习方法和写作方法以及应试技巧，争取尽快获得大学英语四级考试证书。,主要内容：本课程的教学安排为1个学期，共24个学时，教学过程中紧紧围绕大学英语课程教学要求和大学英语考试大纲中关于写作的相关内容设计教学任务，组织安排教学。
2、在教学过程中，既要强调同学们掌握和应用语言知识的准确性，又要注意同学们在应用语言写作时的流利程度和得体性，从而达到既帮助同学们通过考试，又能提高英语水平的教学目的。使同学们在加强英语语言基础知识和基本技能训练的同时，提高英语的综合训练能力。,知识目标：（一）词汇：同学们掌握的总词汇量应达到4500个单词和700个词组，要求同学们能够在认知的基础上学会熟练运用，包括在口头表达以及书面表达两个方面，尤其是书面表达方面。 （二）语法：语法讲授涵盖主谓一致、动词、被动语态、虚拟语气、不定式、动名词、从句等，强化同学们对这类语法知识的掌握，使同学们能够综合运用所学语法知识并能熟练运用于写作过程中。,能力
3、目标：能用常见的应用文体完成一般的写作任务，能够描述个人经历、事件、观感、情感等，能根据规定题目和所提供的提纲、情景、图片或图表等，写出一篇不少于120词的短文，内容基本完整、用词准确恰当，语篇流利连贯，能在一般或应用写作中使用恰当的写作技能。,四级写作的基本要求：共1题，考试时间30分钟。要求同学们写出一篇120-180词的短文，试卷上可能给出题目，或规定情境，或要求看图作文，或给出段首句要求续写；或给出关键词要求写成短文。要求能够正确表达思想，意义连贯，无重大语法错误。写作的内容包括日常生活和一般常识。短文写作部分的目的是测试同学们运用英语书面表达思想的初步能力。,评分原则：从内容和语言两
4、个方面对作文进行综合评判。内容和语言是一个统一体。作文应表达题目所规定的内容，而内容要通过语言来表达，要考虑作文是否切题，是否充分表达思想，也要考虑是否用英语清楚而确切地表达思想，也就是要考虑语言上的错误是否造成理解上的障碍。,阅卷标准,阅卷标准共分五等：2分、5分、8分、11分以及14分。,评分标准：2分-条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。5分-基本切题。表达思想不清楚，连贯性差。有较多的严重语言错误。8分-基本切题。有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯；语言错误相当多，其中一些是严重错误。11分-切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。14分
5、-切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性较好。基本上无语言错误，仅有个别小错。,评分标准的百分制换算,CET-4作文题采用总体评分(Global Scoring)方法。阅卷人员就总的印象给出奖励分(Award Scores)，而不是按语言点的错误数目扣分。,2014年6月RANGE-FINDERS（CET4-W1）,Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the following question. You should write at least 120 words bu
6、t no more than 180 words. Suppose a foreign friend of yours is coming to visit your hometown, what is the most interesting place you would like to take him/her to see and why.,2分一塌糊涂,条理不清，思想紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。 支离破碎，一塌糊涂，词语堆砌。,My name is Cathy, a sunshine girl. I was born in Shanghai. I am
7、very very love my hometown.One day, the weather is very hot. Suppose a foreign of mine is coming to visit my hometown.Moring, I and my friend go to Lujiazui station. Our look at Dongfangmingzhu and Ocean park. It is take us three hours to do it. In the eating of the time, we go to Xiao nan guo. Some
8、 time later, we go to nanjing Road. It is very people to go to there. There have many more popular things and eating.Now, the time was 5 clock. We go to Huanhai Road. Some people ask me “why go to there.” I said “there are very popular buildings and roads, we can buy something our love at there.” My
9、 friends said “Oh, I like.”In the evening. It has a little cold, My friend think go to hotal. We are also go home.The happly day is closed, but our friendship is in my heart all over the word.,5分糊里糊涂,基本切题，表达思想不清楚，连贯性差，有较多严重语言错误。 能有一点儿构句能力，隔三差五有对。,My hometown is Yu Yan with a beautiful mountains. Whe
10、never a foreign friend is coming, I must take him to there. The air is much better than in city. And there are no noise. So I love there. In the summer, its so hot that you are difficult to stay here, you can chose there for you free time. And there are many interesting activities, likes dance with
11、many friends, playing basketball, you will never feel boring there, you also can climb the mountains, when you get into the top, you can see the most beautiful signs. You will never forget it. The food that I think you will must like it. Although you maybe not suit for it. One weeks later, you will
12、like them. Its so delicious. The people who live there, that are friendly with everybody. So you can make many new friends there. They will share many interesting things with you. I think you will love there. And you will have a fun with there.,8分马马虎虎,基本切题。 有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯；语言错误相当多，有一些是严重错误。 残句较多
13、，有基本的构句能力，隔三差五有错。,I am so excited to hear about my foreign friend is coming to visit my hometown. My hometown is Liyang, although it is very small, I am so sure that he will have a good time there.The most interesting place I would like to take him to see is Tianmu lake. There are several reasons sh
14、ould be responsible for it. Firstly, it is a very beautiful place of some flowers, small lakes and small animals are so clever. Secondly, I will take him to taste the head of fish there, it is well known all over the country. Only a famous people come here he taste it. Last but not the least, he cou
15、ld enjoy him in the nature. There are fresh air, clean lakes, high mountions and clever people round Tianmu lake.From the point of my view, all of these reasons will interest him, and I fully convince he will never forget this visit in Tianmu lake.,11分清清楚楚,切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误,Para 1,If a friend
16、of mine ever comes to visit my hometown, Tengwang Ge is certainly the place Ill take him to.,Para 2,To begin with, Tendwang Ge is the symbol of my hometown. It was built in Tang Dynasty and has been kept very well. Many famous poets, such as Wang bo, enjoyed the great view there and created signific
17、ant art works. That is what make Tengwang Ge even more special. Moreover, this old building was reconstructed during the past ten years. As a result it has become more attractive to the tourists. Standing at the top of Tengwang Ge, you can see the Gan River flow towards the sea in front of you. Diff
18、erent kinds of birds fly high in the sky. Skyscrapers form a “forest” across the river and all kinds of business is booming there.,Para 3,Tengwang Ge is not only a historical site but also a symbol in my hometown. I hope my friends will love it just like I do.,14分漂漂亮亮,切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺、连贯，基本上无语言错误。,Par
19、a 1,Known as the Oriental Pearl, Shanghai has not only the prosperous economy but also the unique culture of its own. If a foreign friend of mine would visit my hometown, Shanghai, I strongly recommend him to visit Yu Garden.,Para 2-3,Yu Garden best exhibits the traditional culture of Shanghai. Loca
20、ted in downtown and surrounded by skyscrapers, Yu Garden consists of traditional architectures of Shanghai, which are most two-floor houses.I will take him around the market in Yu Garden to watch the amazing skills of traditional craftsmen and recommend him to buy some handcrafts with Chinese painti
21、ng or calligraphy. As for the meal, he can try the steamed bun, a speciality of Shanghai. Undoubtedly he will be fascinated by the delicious taste.,Para 4,As a Shanghainese, I take pride in introducing the culture of my hometown to foreign friends. I firmly believe that Shanghai will stand and shine
22、 when facing the challenges of western cultures. I hope the visit to Yu Garden will give my friend some new insight into the culture of Shanghai.,写作思路：,第一段：开门见山写出自己家乡以及家乡最有特点的观光浏览地之一-豫园。第二、三段：进一步解释选择豫园作为带外国朋友游览地的原因。第三段：高度总结全文。,Assignment,Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write
23、 a short essay on the following question. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words. Suppose a foreign friend of yours is coming to visit your hometown-Xian, what is the most interesting place you would like to take him/her to see and why.,Outline,Para 1 What is the place? A bri
24、ef introduction of the place.Para 2 Why do you recommend this place?Para 3 Summary/Personal opinion,Para 1, My hometown is Xian. Xian is an old city. It was the capital of 13 dynasties in ancient China. Therefore, there are so many historical of interests here. Such as Terra Cotta Warriors, Dayan To
25、wer and Tang Paradise. If a foreign friend of mine is coming to visit my hometown, the place I would like to recommend is, definitely, City Wall.,西安是一所古城； 13朝古都； 有很多名胜古迹；我最想带外国朋友观光游览的地方是西安的古城墙。,Para 2,Why would I consider the City Wall a place of interest which one would never miss. Actually, there
26、are several reasons accounting for it. Firstly, you can experience the long history of this city the moment you climbing up the wall. Secondly, you can enjoy the view of this modern city, you can even see the Bell Tower if the weather is sunny and air is clear.,最想带外国朋友游城墙的原因：感受西安悠久的历史； 现代城市的景色尽收眼底；,
27、Para 2, Thirdly, if you come here during our Chinese new year, you will be lucky to appreciate the lantern show on the City Wall. It is fantastic. Whats more, if you are hungry, you can walk to the Muslim Street. There, various restaurants providing local cuisines and snacks will amaze you for sure.
28、,农历新年还可观赏到灯盏；离回民街很近，可享受美食。,Para 3,Personally, I highly recommend this place to my dear foreign friend and I am sure he or she will fall in love with it at the first sight.,高度总结概括全文。,2013年12月四级RANGE FINDERS(1-6-7-12)作文第一套,2分一塌糊涂,条理不清，思想紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。 支离破碎，一塌糊涂，词语堆砌。,Now, the more scien
29、ce the more quickly, people start learning how to use Internet. That is know they need. But there were traditional education. Student think “isnt that all the education I really need?” I want to talking in myself thinking.Tradition education can know knowledge of student. But tradition education lea
30、rn in hige, example math, Chinese, ede. I cant chose like knowledge. Many student think that all education I not need.Some people of them is not so like learning on internet. We study at can help us more feel reel to learn. But, we can relaxing know many knowledge in the Internet. Now, there are pho
31、ne hige power, can quickly know news. We have perblem in the learn that use Google. This is my opinion. Are you opinion?,5分糊里糊涂,基本切题，表达思想不清楚，连贯性差，有较多严重语言错误。 能有一点儿构句能力，隔三差五有对。,Para 1,With the development of the Internet, it is growing more and more people dely on it. Just like this picture, some stud
32、ents, teachers, are educated to how to obtain information. There is no doubt for learning on the Internet help us to share our success with each other. But if use most of our time on the Internet, not only can it cause us want not learning, but also it isnt good for education, especially for student
33、s. Some students even use obtain information or answer when take an examination.,Para 2,To sum up, I cling to believe that education doesnt simply mean learning to obtain information. You think, where is the information come from? If we only learn how to obtain, it is bad for development and the inf
34、ormation cant grow. Once you know how to use Google or Baidu, maybe you will think the teacher have just taught you are not available. So it is bad for education from teacher.,8分马马虎虎,基本切题。 有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯；语言错误相当多，有一些是严重错误。 残句较多，有基本的构句能力，隔三差五有错。,Para 1,From this picture, we can know more and more
35、 people begin to using internet to learning. Some people hold a mind that once I learn how to use Internet, isnt that all the education I really need? For this we can find that Internet have a influence to our life, education and job. People have a few patience to learning because they can know ever
36、ything from internet.,Para 2,But I firmly believe that we must learn in school even the Internet is fast and good. I trust that people can get a amount of information in Internet, in other words, education doesnt simply mean learning to obtain information. Some reasons about it. Firstly, students ca
37、n learn how to get along with strangers when they learning in school. It can help them grow health. The more important is students can communication with their friends and can learn how to cooperation and compitetion.,Para 3,From these reasons, we can know education doesnt mean learning to obtain in
38、formation.,11分清清楚楚,切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误,Para 1,Nowadays, we can hardly live a single day without internet, for we can search almost all the information on the internet. Just as the picture shows, some students even think that learning how to use internet is equal to receiving all the education he
39、 needs.,Para 2,However, education will never simply mean learning to obtain information. There are several reasons for it. Firstly, education includes not only gaining more knowledge but also improving comprehensive skills. Secondly, information provided on the internet consists of positive and nega
40、tive parts, and its difficult for you to make sure what you absorbed is useful. Whats more, education can be compared to a building while information makes the basis, necessary but uncomplete. We should absorb more things from our daily life and practical experience.,Para 3,So its natural for us to
41、draw a conclusion that learning to obtain information is only one part of education. Wed better use internet searching for information as a tool to gain better education rather than fully depend on it.,14分漂漂亮亮,切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺、连贯，基本上无语言错误。,Para 1,This picture is actually a mirror of the growing impact
42、 the Internet has on peoples process of learning. Theres no denying that the Internet does make learning more convenient. However, we shouldnt overlook the fact that this easy access to obtain information can make people think that education is no longer nec essary and that one can be equally well-e
43、ducated just using the Internet.,Para 2,Those holding this view tend to misunderstand the real sense of education, which lies in the following. Firstly, obtaining information doesnt necessarily lead to obtaining truth. We find the Internet convenient and useful because we are well-educated and capab
44、le of telling right from wrong. We should owe this capability to education. Secondly, through education one learns not only to obtain the truth, but to think. Thinking makes us innovative and creative. Furthermore, it is thinking that helps us learn about morality. From my point of view, creativity
45、and morality are what the society needs to grow healthier.,Para 3,To conclude, education doesnt simply mean obtaining information. Education can never be replaced by Internet learning.,.,写作思路：,第一段：描述图片内容，开门见山提出观点：通过互联网获取知识并不能够代替传统教育。第二段：进一步解释说明为什么传统教育不能被通过互联网获取知识所取代。第三段：高度总结全文。,常见错误:,1、篇章：引子过长，结构混乱 2、句子结构：缺乏基本的句子意识，只有词汇的堆砌 3、词汇：拼写、动词时态、名词单复数、形容词副词比较级别、固定搭配、词汇的选择等方面错误,应对策略:,1、篇章：开门见山，直奔主题（紧扣所给提纲写出主题句）。使用合适的方法展开主题句（常用方法如：列举，因果，举例等） 2、句子结构：适当使用从句、倒装句、非谓语动词、插入语，从而使文章句子结构稍微复杂而富于变化。 3、词汇：尽量使用与主题相关的一些重要词汇，避开用得过于泛滥的词汇。,
