1、2018写作指导-建议信,平遥第三中学校 李建红,2019/7/21,1,To better your writing 让你的作文 起来,“亮”,students work(学生作品）,自我介绍,写信目的,列举原因,期待结果,students work(学生作品）,写信目的,期待结果,对活动的理解,【教师点评】书写整洁，过了卷面关措辞准确，过了语言关文脉清晰，过了内容关过渡流畅，过了结构关总评： 这两篇文章写得很棒！,列举原因,申请信,What makes a good piece of writing?,1.neat writing书写,2. content内容,3. structure结构
2、,4. language语言,Good first impression,Well organized and smoothly developed,Everything required included,No Chinglish No Grammatical mistakes exactly used words and relatively changed sentence patterns,How to better your writing,英语写作五部曲,step1 topic exploring 审题,step2 wording 构词,step3 sentence making
3、成句,step4 essay writing 成篇,step5 improving 修订,Step1 审题,1 审体裁,2 审人称,3 审时态,4 审要点,定文章结构,练 国外某网站举办新的一轮网上讲座活动，正面向全球中学生征集话题。假设你是新华中学的学生李华，经常访问该网站。现请你用英文给该网站发送一封电子邮件，向其推荐话题。内容包括:自我介绍 写信目的 话题：我们应该感恩（thankful).推荐理由 预祝活动成功 注意：1.词数100左右; 2.邮件格式已为你给出； 3.邮件出不能出现本人信息；4.在答题卡上作答。,审 题,文 体： 时 态： 人 称: 内容要点：,推荐信,一般现在时为主
4、,1.向全球中学生征集话题 2.新华中学的学生 3.访问你们的网站 4.推荐一个话题 5.我们应该感恩 6.推荐理由 7.预祝活动成功,第一人称为主,三段式,总,分,总,自我介绍 写信目的,话题（我们应该感恩） 列举理由,预祝活动成功,in brief,in detail,in brief,文章结构,Step2 wording,拼写 词性 近义词 同音词 单复数 冠词 大小写,Simple mistakes leave a bad impression!,Wording 构词,Find the key words 找关键词,2.新华中学的学生,3.访问你们的网站,4.推荐一个话题,5.我们应该
5、感恩,6.推荐理由,7.预祝活动成功,Translate the key words 翻译关键词（除去翻译第6个要点）,1.向全球中学生征集话题,研,2.新华中学的学生,a student from Xin Hua Middle School,3.访问你们的网站,visit your website,4.推荐一个话题,recommend one,5.我们应该感恩,We should be thankful.,6.推荐理由,7.预祝活动成功,Wish the activity a great success.,looking for topics from students all over t
6、he world,1.向全球中学生 征集话题,构词,Paragraph1,Paragraph2,Paragraph3,step3 sentencing 成句,1 简单句,2 并列句,3 复合句,4 非谓语形式,5 特殊结构,时态，语态,别忘了并列连词,No Chinglish!,连词的选择,主语一致,避生就熟！,强调句型；倒装； 独立主格结构,成句,Step4 成篇That we should be thankful is a good idea. It is our parents who brought us up through thick and thin, so we should
7、thank them. We owe our teachers thanks, for we couldnt be who we are now without their hard work. Thankfulness is also our traditional Chinese virtue. Where there is thankfulness, there are hopes to make the world better. Only with a thankful heart, can we fully realize how beautiful life is.,In my
8、opinion,firstly,besides,Whats more,Necessary conjunctions make a pieces a writing more smoothly developed.,成篇,建议性书信文体模板：,Dear（So glad to have received your last letter), Im(简单自我介绍），Im writing to(表明写信目的）I think.is a good idea/I suggest / recommend / adviseI have my reasons, firstly.,then.,finallyBest
9、 regards and wish you(简单祝福)Yours,建议信,修订,Now, Lets check whether our writing has been improved in content, structure and language ? 我们的文章亮起来了么？,Im Lihua, a student from Xin Hua Middle School. I often visit your website, where I got the wonderful news that youre looking for topics from students all ov
10、er the world. Here, Im writing to recommend one.In my opinion, that we should be thankful is a good idea. Firstly, it is our parents who brought us up through thick and thin, so we should thank them. Besides, we owe our teachers thanks, for we couldnt be who we are now without their hard work. Whats
11、 more, thankfulness is also our traditional Chinese virtue. Where there is thankfulness, there are hopes to make the world better. Only with a thankful heart, can we fully realize how beautiful life is. Hopefully, my topic will be chosen. Wish the activity a great success.,23分,建议信,建议信是向别人提出合理的建议，让对方
12、接受自己的想法、主张，解决有关问题。建议信不是投诉信，观点要合情合理，注意礼貌当先。同时，建议信要简洁明确、理由充足，具有合理性和说服力。通常包括： 1. 说明写信目的。 2. 提出建议与改进措施并给予忠告。 3. 表达希望采纳建议并期盼回复。,文体概述,常用语块1. 给某人提建议 _2. 如下 _3. 在做某事时遇到困难_4. 利用 _5. 向某人征求意见_,ask sb. for advice,give sb. some advice (on),as follows,have difficulty/trouble in doing sth.,make use of,6. 制订计划 _ 7.
13、 认为有用 _ 8. 参加 _ 9. 听从某人的建议 _ 10. 把考虑在内 _,take sth. into account/consideration,make a plan,findhelpful/useful/beneficial,take part in/participate in,follow ones advice,11. 得到改善 _ 12. 有所好转 _ 13. 依我看来 _ 14. 我已收到你的来信，得知你_ 15. 我建议 _,I would like to suggest that/I would like to make a recommendation that/
14、I am writing to advise you of/If I were you, I would/May I suggest that/I would like to put forward the suggestion that,get improved,change for the better,in my opinion/in my view/from my point of view,I have received your letter saying that you,套用句式1. 你就向我寻求建议，我会尽力提一些建设性的建议。2. 我觉得如果能够将会很有帮助的。,1. Yo
15、u have asked me for my advice with regard toand I will try to make some constructive suggestions.,2. I feel that it would be beneficial if,3. 我希望这些建议会对你有所帮助。4. 我相信你会考虑我的建议的。5. 如能看到我会非常开心的。,3. I hope you will find these suggestions helpful/useful.,5. I would be more than happy to see,4. I trust youll
16、 take my suggestion into account./I trust youll take good consideration of my suggestion.,课堂练习假定你是李华，请根据所给材料，给Lora写一封回信。要点如下： 1. Lora打算利用暑假打工。 2. Lora父母不同意的理由。 3. 你给Lora的具体建议。 注意：1. 词数100左右。2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。3. 开头语和结束语已为你写好。,Dear Lora,I have just read your letter in the magazine. I know that you wa
17、nt to work part-time this summer. But your parents dont allow you to do so. I understand your situation.I think your parents may have their reasons. They may regard learning as the most important task for you. Perhaps theyd like you to make use of this summer holiday to study. Besides, they may thin
18、k you are too young to work.,I think you had better have a talk with your parents. If they agree, you should make a detailed plan for your study and work, ask your friends to work together with you, and tell your parents not to worry about you because you are old enough to manage things properly.Any
19、way, I would be more than happy to wish you a pleasant summer. Yours truly, Li Hua,课外作业假定你是李华，最近你们班从英国转来了一名新生Jenny。这是她第一次远离家乡，她很想念父母及家人，有时候思念至深，常常独自一个人深夜哭泣。对此，请你给Jenny写一封建议信，要点如下： 1. 鼓励Jenny坚定求学信念，志存高远，四海为家。 2. 就Jenny的目前状况，提两到三个建议。 注意：1. 词数100左右。2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。3. 开头语和结束语已为你写好。,Dear Jenny,I am so
20、 glad to have a talk with you. I understand your present situation for I have had a similar experience before.People often miss their parents the first time they leave home. Most people do have to leave home for higher education or employment. I think you should realize that present separation will
21、help with your academic development and your improvement of personal ability.,Try to make friends on your school campus, and share ideas with your classmates who are physically closest to you now. Maybe you will still miss your parents, but your new friends will bring happiness and joy to your new life. Also I suggest you take an active part in different kinds of activities in school. You will get much pleasure from it.Wish you happy every day. Yours faithfully, Li Hua,
