1、2009 年 11 月 21 号雅思写作点评小作文：据网友回忆，小作文为线状图，题目如下：The line graph show the number of students enrolled on different tyeps of courses in a univeristy in the years 2006-2008 and the predicted number from 2009 to 2011.线状图作为每个月必考的题型，本月已是第三次出现(11 月 8 号，11 月 19 号两次出现) 。 写作过程中烤鸭们一定要注意以下几点：1.时态的灵活转化，2006 年到 2008
2、年用一般过去式，2009 年到 2011 年用一般将来时。 而且要注意一般将来时的表示不仅仅只有 will，还有 is expected to/ is projected to/ is forecast to 等同义词来进行替换。 2.注意“文字说明为主，数据支持为辅” 而且一定要注意数字与数字之间的对比。3.注意用词的多样性，线状图中常见的同义词替换如下：表示上升的动词Go up (went up ) increase (increased) rise (rose) ascend (ascended) Grow( grew ) 括号里是过去时，其中 rise 与 increase 也经常做名
3、词使用表示下降的动词Decline dip fall decrease drop descend sink 其中，decline, fall, drop, decrease 也经常做名词使用表示急剧下降的动词(a steep )Dive plunge 表示速度快的形容词Sharp rapid dramatic precipitous drastic steep 表示缓慢，逐渐的形容词Gradual gentle steady slow 表示幅度大的形容词Significant Marked substantial drastic dramatic 表示幅度小的形容词Modest slight
4、marginal moderate 表示波动的动词Oscillate wave fluctuate (fluctuation)表示稳定在一个水平上的词组Level off at stabilize at level out at reach a plateau at hover at 表示到达最高点的词组Peak at reach the highest point at Peak 也可以作名词表示到达最低点的词组Reach the bottom at bottom out at the lowest point at bottom Bottom 也可以作名词表示到达多少数量的及物动词或词组R
5、each hit arrive at register amount to stand at 表示占多少的词组（后面跟百分数或者数字）Account for make up represent occupy constitute 表示对将来数字预测的及物动词Expect predict project forecast A is expected/projected/predicted/forecast to reach 表示大约的副词或词组About roughly around just over approximately just under 表示分别的词组Respectively s
6、eparately （用在句子结尾，表示两组元素分别对应）例如：During the financial crisis ,the unemployment rate in China and America stayed at 3.3% and 5% respectively/separately .大作文：11 月 21 号大作文题目如下： Individuals and countries fail to help every person who needs help in the world, so we should only be concerned about our own c
7、ommunities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 不难看出，该题属于国际援助类题型的旧题重组，我们可以在 2002 年 8 月 17 号，2006 年6 月 10 号，2007 年 11 月 24 号，2009 年 2 月 7 号，2009 年 6 月 27 号的 task 2 中找到该题的影子。一般而言，国际援助类题型的考察主要集中在以下 4 个方面： 1. 国际援助两种渠道的利弊谈：是直接提供给需要援助的社区还是通过一个国家级或国际的慈善组织转达给被支援地区，具体题目详见 06 年 6 月 10 号的考题。
8、2. 国际援助的正负面影响， 具体题目详见 07 年 11 月 24 号的考题。3. 国际援助的形式：是通过资金援助还是其他实际的方式，比如在各个领域给予发展性建议，具体题目详见 09 年 2 月 7 号，09 年 6 月 27 号的考题。 4. 国际援助的必要性探讨：如富国有道义上的责任援助穷国，但受援国政府有可能滥用和贪污资金和物资，具体详见 2002 年 8 月 17 号和 09 年 11 月 21 号的考题。可见考察的角度既有宏观，又有微观；考题的切入点既有援助国，又有受援国。烤鸭只有从这 4 个层面立体地去搭建国际援助话题的内容和语言框架，才能真正做到以不变应万变，百战不殆。 下面从
9、结构，内容，语言这三个层面来为广大烤鸭们演示一下此文的写法： 由于题目中出现了 only 这样极端化的词语，在结构上我们可以采取一边倒的形式，具体遵循“起承转合”四字原则。全文四段走，开头段：“起” ，摆明立场(strongly disagree)；主体 1，2 段：“承”论述国际援助必要性的理由；主体 3 段：“转”通过驳斥反方论点强化己方论点；结尾段总结全文。 具体内容和语言如下： 第一段: 起，交代背景，摆出己方观点，共 3 句话It is universally acknowledged that international aid constitutes an indispensab
10、le role in helping countries and communities that are in need. 语言点评： it is universally acknowledged that 句型， constitutes an indispensable role in doing sth 短语。However, people have been arguing about whether or not we are supposed to barely concentrate on our own development since hardly could we sat
11、isfy every needy individuals requirement.语言点评： 注意同义转化原文，切忌照抄原文，即把 so we should only be concerned about our own communities and countries. 转化成 we are supposed to barely concentrate on our own development，注意“hardly could we satisfy every needy individuals requirement.”这一倒装句的使用。 From my perspective, th
12、is viewpoint is over simplistic and we need to explore this issue from several angles. 第二段:承，论证己方论点，共 5 句话。No one can deny the fact that as a global citizen, we are endowed with the moral obligation to provide relief to those impoverished ones regardless of their nationality, educational background,
13、 and social status. 语言点评：No one can deny the fact that 句型， be endowed with,regardless of 短语,同时要注意用词的复杂原则，用 impoverished 替换 poor,obligation 替换 right, Timely aid including shelter, water, food, clothes can assist those severe victims who suffer from natural disasters( such as earthquake,vulcanian erup
14、tion, tsunami, draught, flood) rebound swiftly from economical depression and rehabilitate their homeland. 语言点评：rebound from 短语,同时要注意用词的温暖原则，如用 timely 来温暖 aid, 用severe 温暖 victim,专业词汇在平时一定要在平时注意积累，如 earthquake,vulcanian eruption,tsunami, draught, floodThe 5.12 earthquake which hit Sichuan province (C
15、hina), for example, aroused major concern worldwide and countries,neighbouring or overseas, all offered assistance either in the form of finance or beneficence. 语言点评：造句的时候一定要注意长短句结合，插入语的使用会使文章错落有致，抑扬顿挫。 Thanks to the generous support from other nations, people in Sichuan were rapidly rescued from lo
16、ng-term economical and ideological depression. Greatly encouraged and inspired,people there quickly devoted themselves to rebuilding their lost living surrounding and returning back to their normal life. 语言点评：进一步论证第三句，注意非谓语动词 Greatly encouraged and inspired,的使用以及be rescued from 和 devote oneself to 等
17、短语的使用。 第三段:承，进一步论证己方论点，共 4 句话。Meanwhile, humanitarian relief plays a significant part in promoting mutual understanding between nations and races, thereby conciliating diplomatic crisis between countries. 语言点评：注意 play a significant part 等短语以及 thereby conciliating diplomatic crisis between countries
18、伴随状语的使用。 Conflicts between nations sometimes deprive from huge disparity in the material standard of living or lack of talks and communications. 语言点评：注意 deprive from 的使用,以及专有名词物质生活水平 material standard of livingHumanitarian aid opens a door of interaction between nations, would it be in the field of
19、culture, economy, politics, military and diplomacy. As a result, some regional and national tension can be greatly eased. 语言点评：注意 opens a door of 以及倒装结构 would it be in the field of 的使用。 第四段:转，先承认对方观点，再驳斥最后进一步强化己方论点，共 5 句话。Some people might argue that support from an individual or a country is so lim
20、ited that it can scarcely meet the endless requirements of those refugees and sufferers. 语言点评：注意 so. that 结构的使用。 However, they neglect the fact that many hands make light work. A joint effort from all walks of society may become a huge financial and material help to the recipient countries. For exam
21、ple, by saving a drop of water, we may together provide an ocean to the thirsty children in Sahara;By economizing a grain of rice, we could salvage a starving kid from the verge of death in Africa; By conserving every kilowatt-hour of electricity,we can illuminate some all year round dark-stricken a
22、rea such as the North Pole. 语言点评：注意 many hands make light work 这一俗语的使用，排比句型 by doing sth, we can.使得文章气势磅礴。 第五段:合，总结全文，共 1 句话 To conclude, though individual help seems trivial in front of such a huge demand from the poverty-stricken area, I still believe a united endeavor can conquer all these barriers and together we can heal the world and create a better living environment. 语言点评：先让步在展望未来。语言上借用迈克尔杰克逊的一首歌名 heal the world. 文章意境全出。
