1、2012 届高考英语考前冲刺精品复习讲义（北师大版）：写作（二十一）据报道，报考技校(vocational school)的人数比往年有显著的增长。试从社会需求、人才观念、待遇报酬等方面分析这一现象。学生习作外教批改It is reported that the number of students who enter1 are entering for vocationalschools is larger than ever before.What has2 caused it this3 ?The main three reasons are as follows：4First，as g
2、reat changes have taken place in our country since the entrance to WTO，more and more specialized personnel are needed.So5 the development of vocationalschool is very_fast_and_the_quality_of_it_has_increased_ a_lot6 vocational schoolshave developed quickly and training has increased in quality.Second
3、，as the “knowledge economy” israpidlytakingshape， we need to learnmodernscience and technology，or we won t survive in the society.The_lastLast but not least ， 7 the income of a8 specializedpersonnelis not bad.Thanksto the shortage of such personnel in our country， they can get_well_paid9 instead10co
4、mmand a better salary.Because_of11 With such good conditions， why not being12 a_specialized_personnellearna specialized skill?旁批1进行时强调动作还在继续。而一般现在时指一种习惯，这里使用不合适。2这里用现在完成时表示这种趋势现在仍然存在。3 this把这个句子与前面的观点联系起来。4如果文章的思路和框架清晰，就不必这样表达。5要使文章更完美，可以用As a result。6这句写得很啰嗦，读起来也很别扭。参见改写后的句子。7正确的说法是last but not lea
5、st， last前不要加the 。8 personnel是复数名词，不可与a 连用。9口语中可以说某人can get well paid，书面语这样写就不太正式。参见改写后的句子。用心爱心专心- 1 -10没有引入另一种情况，所以没有必要说instead 。11 because of用来表示原因，而这里不是谈原因。12正确的句型是why not do something，动词要用原形。这是一篇较好的作文。论述有力，论据充分。然而作文中出现了多处错误，有些句子写得很不恰当，作文分数也因此降低了。改进建议：正确使用标点符号。不需要句号的地方，不要用句号。另外，要清楚什么时候该用现在进行时而不用一般
6、现在时。高分作文秘诀之十四：尽量少使用直接引语，而多使用间接引语。例如：Instead of( 不要说： )I believethatreadingbooks is a waste of timebecausemy UncleTom says so.He always tells me，“ Reading books is a waste of time.”Use ( 要说： )My Uncle Tomoftentellsme thatreading books is a waste of time.Ibelievethat there is some truth in this.Instea
7、d of (不要说： )People say ，“ Internet caf s should be banned.”Use ( 要说： )People believe that Internet cafs should be banned.Instead of (不要说： )A person said to me，“ Dont forget to bring enough food andwater. ”Use ( 要说： )I was reminded to bring enough food and water.近期，世界范围内粮食短缺，价格上涨。 在你校开展的研究性学习中，你们小组以“
8、 The WorldFood Crisis”这一主题进行研究，现在请你代表你们小组用英语向全体同学简要介绍你们的研究成果。词数120 左右。参考词汇：谷物产量grain output；城市化 urbanization；生物燃料 biofuel_参考范文：Hello ，everyone!Now let me tell you something about our research project The World Food Crisis onbehalf of our group.As we know ， food shortage has hit many countries and ev
9、en caused social unrest insome areas.But what has caused the current world food crisis？Firstly， annual world用心爱心专心- 2 -grain output had declined because of climate changes.Secondly， lots of farmland hasgiven way to factories and buildings due to the rapid development of industry andurbanization.Besi
10、des， faced withthe risingenergy prices ， some people use grainforbiofuel， which has worsened the severe situation.Howcan we deal withthe problem ？ On the one hand ， we shouldfocus on the environmentalprotectionand improve the ecology.Onthe otherhand，strictmeasures shouldbe takento protect farmland.Ifthe whole world works together， I thinkmore food willbe produced and we can createa harmonious world.用心爱心专心- 3 -
