1、PS 申请写作样本Subject: Succesful NYU Stern Applicant 1. Think about the decisions you have made in your life. Describe the follow ing: PAST: What choices have you made that led you to your current position ? PRESENT: Why is a Stern MBA necessary at this point in your life? FUTURE What is your desired pos
2、ition upon graduation from the Stern School? I li ke options, I like security, and I like power. With these wants, I knew at a very early age that I would enter business and thus I attended a college th at specializes in the subject. In my first position out of school, I was hir ed by Dunhill Equiti
3、es as a cold-caller. After several weeks of being hung u p on by angry prospects, I decided that this career path would not lead me t o success. I then moved within the firm to a position as sales assistant. Wh ile this was by no means my dream job, I learned a tremendous amount about b usiness, and
4、 I gained useful exposure to the world of finance. Unfortunately , the company hit a period of instability, and after ten months I transferre d with my boss to Coleman I was on my way. The following summer I continued to work a s a sternperson, and I also fished my own traps. I continued lobstering
5、thro ughout the rest of high school and college, and it helped me finance my coll ege education.In addition to being ambitious and motivated enough to put my heart into even mundane, low-level tasks, I am also extremely organized. Thi s is one characteristic that has always received praise. I pay pa
6、rticular at tention to detail, which I believe has contributed to my success thus far. I take pride in my work, and I look at it as a representation of myself. In m y position at Sanford Bernstein as a Consultant Liaison, I market my firm to the financial consulting community. Maintaining the integr
7、ity of the firm i s vital and errors are disastrous. When training new group members, I stress this point most thoroughly.I work in a group that currently has six members . The group serves as a central source of information for the firm, and its success relies on an extraordinary amount of cooperat
8、ion from each of us. As a senior member, I am able to contribute to the group in several ways inclu ding: training group members, controlling the quality of the group 抯 output, managing and accurately completing multiple requests with short turnaround times, gathering and conveying information from
9、senior investment profession als, collecting and calculating data, maintaining databases, overseeing proj ects aimed at making long-term improvements to the group 抯 processes, and st rengthening my own foundation of knowledge to be used as a resource. Recentl y, as the result of a manager leaving th
10、e firm, I have also taken on some of the managerial responsibilities for the group including prioritizing and de legating assignments.Though I am an excellent team player, in business schoo l I would like to sharpen my managerial skills. I have found that I need to overcompensate for my 搒 oft?appear
11、ance in order to get my point across. I ho pe to improve my negotiating skills and to gain more experience in getting g roup members to carry their own weight. At the same time, I do not want to b ecome a tyrant. To be effective, it is important for a manager to maintain t he proper balance of power
12、 and compassion. Only in this way, will I be able to lead a team of people to realizing the goals of a firm.4. (Optional) Plea se provide any additional information that you would like to bring to the at tention of the Admission Committee. If you are unable to submit a recommenda tion from a current
13、 employer, please give your reason here.To satisfy my des ire for success, I must continue my education. Of the six business schools t o which I am applying, the Stern School is my first choice. I am very excite d about entering an MBA program that will allow me to focus on my interest i n finance a
14、s well as provide me with the career possibilities and exposure t o resources, such as networks and learning tools, which I do not currently h ave. At Stern, I know that my investment of time, energy, and money will be well rewarded. At this point in my life, I believe I have great potential to gain
15、 much from a business degree since I have been exposed to the business environment for the past eight and a half years. I now posses a strong found ation to build upon, and I am ready to assume the rigors and challenges of t he Stern School 抯 MBA program.In addition to its academic program, the Ster
16、n community is itself very appealing. The three undergraduate schools that I applied to were Babson, Bentley and Bryant. Babson College became my first c hoice as soon as I visited its quaint campus and fell in love with the frien dly atmosphere and cultural diversity. From someone coming from a sma
17、ll fish ing village in Maine, it was refreshing to be surrounded by family. Living i n New York City has broadened my exposure to include a fast-paced, career-mi nded atmosphere. The combination of these characteristics at the Stern Schoo l will provide me with an excellent learning environment, and
18、 I hope to atte nd Stern for many of the same reasons I selected Babson.I have provided thre e recommendations. One is from my former employer, Andrew Tzanides, with who m I worked closely for two years. Another is from my current manager, Gail L andis, who joined my department in January of 1998. A
19、t that time, I also had a direct manager, Catherine Acosta. I had worked with Cathy on a daily basi s since I joined Bernstein in May of 1996,and she is providing my third reco mmendation. Due to the lack of growth opportunities in my position at the be ginning of 1998,I was seeking employment elsew
20、here. The discrepancy between my goals and my education and work experience resulted in a very frustrating job search. I wanted to redirect my career from RFP writing to investment b anking, but given my background, it was difficult. At this point, I decided that going back to school to pursue my MB
21、A would be the most important step I could take. In the meantime, Cathy left Bernstein and Gail assumed her man agement responsibilities until a replacement could be hired. Gail has now be en working with my group for approximately six months. Due to your request f or a recommendation from my curren
22、t supervisor and due to my circumstances, I felt it necessary to include recommendations from both Cathy and Gail. * By: Successful Harvard Applicant Subject: Successful at Harvard, Princeton, Dartmouth, and Stanford Hiking to Understanding Surrounded by thousands of stars, complete silence, and spe
23、ctacular mountains, I stood atop New Hampshires Presidential Range a westruck by natures beauty. Immediately, I realized that I must dedicate my life to understanding the causes of the universes beauty. In addition, the hike taught me several valuable lessons that will allow me to increase my u nder
24、standing through scientific research. Although the first few miles of th e hike up Mt. Madison did not offer fantastic views, the vistas became spect acular once I climbed above tree line. Immediately, I sensed that understand ing the natural world parallels climbing a mountain. To reach my goal of
25、tot al comprehension of natural phenomena, I realized that I must begin with kno wledge that may be uninteresting by itself. However, this knowledge will for m the foundation of an accurate view of the universe. Much like every step w hile hiking leads the hiker nearer the mountain peak, all knowled
26、ge leads th e scientist nearer total understanding. Above tree line, the barrenness and silence of the hike taught me that individuals must have their own direction . All hikers know that they must carry complete maps to reach their destinat ions; they do not allow others to hold their maps for them
27、. Similarly, surro unded only by mountaintops, sky, and silence, I recognized the need to remai n individually focused on my lifes goal of understanding the physical unive rse. At the summit, the view of the surrounding mountain range is spectacula r. The panorama offers a view of hills and smaller
28、mountains. Some people du ring their lives climb many small hills. However, to have the most accurate view of the world, I must be dedicated to climbing the biggest mountains I c an find. Too often people simply hike across a flat valley without ascending because they content themselves with the sce
29、nery. The mountain showed me th at I cannot content myself with the scenery. When night fell upon the summit , I stared at the slowly appearing stars until they completely filled the ni ght sky. Despite the windy conditions and below freezing temperatures, I cou ld not tear myself away from the awe-
30、inspiring beauty of the cosmos. Similar ly, despite the frustration and difficulties inherent in scientific study, I cannot retreat from my goal of universal understanding. When observing Satu rns rising, the Milky Way Cloud, and the Perseid meteor shower, I simultane ously felt a great sense of ins
31、ignificance and purpose. Obviously, earthly c oncerns are insignificant to the rest of the universe. However, I experience d the overriding need to understand the origins and causes of these phenomen a. The hike also strengthened my resolve to climb the mountain of knowledge while still taking time
32、to gaze at the wondrous scenery. Only then can the b eauty of the universe and the study of science be purposefully united. Attai ning this union is my lifelong goal. Have your Essay Edited Go to View Essays Page * Subject: Succesful Harvard Transfer (5) Briefly, please indicate the most influential
33、 factors in your original d ecision to attend your present college, such as location, cost, large/small student body, only option, special program offered, Early Decision plan. (8) Please indicate your intended field of specialization and briefly outline y our academic plans at Harvard-Radcliffe. (9
34、)What are your current postgradua te/career plans? (10)Briefly discuss one book that has strongly influenced y ou. (11)Please use the space below to discuss briefly the one or two extracu rricular activities that have meant the most to you during college or high s chool. Which activities, if any, wo
35、uld you like to pursue while at Harvard-R adcliffe? (14) In the space below or on a separate sheet, please explain in some detail your reasons for wanting to transfer to Harvard-Radcliffe Colleg e. I applied to the University of Pennsylvania under the Early Decision plan . U. Penn. has a beautiful c
36、ampus, a diverse student body, and almost unlimi ted opportunities to excel at extra-curricular activities. My main motivatio n in applying under the Early Decision plan, however, was my eagerness to st udy at an Ivy League institution with one of the best liberal arts curricula available. I intend
37、to eventually become an economist. To achieve this goal , I would like to double major in economics and psychology at Harvard. Altho ugh this combination might seem unusual, I think it will enable me to practi ce economics with insight on human thinking. In addition to pursuing academi c excellence,
38、 I also intend to participate in research and extracurricular a ctivities related to these two fields. After I graduate college, I intend to work for a few years in an economics-related field either in the United Sta tes or in Brazil, and then to go to graduate school. My long-term dream is t o retu
39、rn to Brazil and help the government create a stable economic plan. Th e plan I envision would put Brazil, a country with great potential, on the r ight track to achieve a faster pace of development and to become, once again , a reliable country for international investment. With a stable economy, B
40、r azil can invest more funds in critical areas like education. I will be very satisfied with my career if I know I have contributed to the development of a great economic power. “YES“ was the final answer, and it made me feel li ke a master of negotiation, excelling at a task at which both the treas
41、urer and the president had failed. As a new board member of the Penn Brazilian Cl ub, I had the responsibility of negotiating with Brazil, the restaurant whic h presently holds the monopoly of Brazilian food in Philadelphia. I was tryi ng to get the restaurant to decrease the price of the “feijoada.
42、“ This was t he first chance I had to put in practice the techniques of “principled negot iation, “ which I learned from the book Getting to Yes. Getting to Yes chan ged my life in almost every sense. On many occasions, my friends and relativ es have expressed their admiration at the changes they no
43、ticed in my persona lity and behavior. Although I considered myself a good negotiator since chil dhood, Getting to Yes taught me how mistaken I was about the art of persuasi on. I have learned to search for alternatives which fulfill the interests of all parties to a negotiation, rather than to seek
44、 opportunities to take adv antage of the opposition. A masterpiece on the art of negotiation, Getting t o Yes shows how reason, as opposed to force; interests, as opposed to positi ons; and the building of lasting relationships, as opposed to determination for “winning, “ can bring victory to both s
45、ides in a negotiation. When I cam e to the United States from Brazil, I realized that American culture differe d significantly from my own. I wanted to give the Americans I met an opportu nity to learn from my culture as much as I was learning from theirs. To acco mplish this goal, I founded the Pin
46、e Crest Brazilian Club, of which I became president and activities manager. The club soon grew into one of the most s uccessful and active organizations at my Florida high school. The fifty memb ers had the opportunity to experience the food, music, dance, and other cult ural activities of Brazil. A
47、lthough I am no longer in Florida, I have remain ed one of the most active board members of the Brazilian Club. In order to m aintain the tradition I initiated, I give advice to the companys president. In addition to being active in the Brazilian Club, I have also founded and played guitar in two ba
48、nds. With one of my friends, I founded a band named Draconia which became very well-known throughout the entire school after our first concert in May of my junior year. As we began to practice more seriou sly, several more concerts followed. By my fourth week of college, I had alr eady founded anoth
49、er band. My new band, KB-2,already has nine soft rock song s. Although we havent yet had our first concert, our practices are intense and the members take their work very seriously. At Harvard, I expect to con tinue pursuing these two activities that have played such a large role in th e formation of my personal traits. I owe to these activities most of my lead ership and interpersonal skills. I am prepared for the challenge of creating the most active and successful Brazilian club Harvard has ever had, and, i
