1、,读后续写写作指导,浙江省普陀中学 张成年,四种能力,-刘庆思、陈康（2016）,语言能力 文化意识 思维品质 学习能力,英语学科核心素养,读后续写遵循了语言学习规律，提供语篇情境，撩起表达意愿。,阅读理解与写作产出； 语言学习与语言运用； 内容创造与语言模仿；,四个“有”,创造有依据 模仿有样板 互动有读物 拉平有标杆,三个“紧密结合“,有效促学,“读思写”的过程指导,读,读出原文中的有效信息，为思做好铺垫和准备；,思,构思故事情节，是一个创造的过程； 既要结合读出来的信息，又要创造自己的内容；,写,通过写作微技能的具体运用落实思的结果， 是对思的精准表达。,读出原文中有效信息,原文是续写的
2、起点； 读懂内容是续写的基础； 创造有根有据，发展合情合理。,读什么？,1、读懂内容，为续写的融洽性奠定基础,2、读出线索，为思维的逻辑发展指明方向,After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hop
3、e it would lead her to the lake. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.,3、读出语言特点，为连贯性提供依据,flag them Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty.,picked her way, walked, climbed, kept moving,If only she had not left he
4、r mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. The farther she walked, the more confused she became.,3.读出语言特点，为上下文的连贯提供依据,为续写的融洽性奠定基础,为思维的逻辑发展指明方向,为上下文连贯性提供依据,读-利用文本特征，读出有效信息,“读思写”的过程指导,读,读出原文中的有效信息，为思做好铺垫和准备；,思,构思故事情节，是一个创造的过程； 既要结合读出来的信息，又要创造自己的内容；,写,通过写作微技能
5、的具体运用落实思的结果， 是对思的精准表达。,思-结合续写导引，构思合理情节,情节要完整,情感要呼应,思考情节如何发展？,Its a perfect family summer seaside holiday. Occasionally some white clouds floated across the blue sky. The sand beach was soft and comfortable. The water was glistering in the morning sunlight and the surf was cool on their feet as Krin
6、and Paula leisurely walked along the water edge. The brother and sister began to make some sand castles not far away. Mother sat under a big umbrella, reading a book with a bottle of lemonade in her hand. Father was busy exchanging a few words of greetings with the strangers he met on the beach.,Sud
7、denly, Chris spotted some pieces of seashells lying scattered on the picturesque beach and small holes stretching along it where the crabs had hidden. He immediately invited Paula to collect shells and search the holes together with him. They were having a ball exploring what appeared to be a never-
8、ending beach. After a while, they stopped and looked back. Their parents and the umbrellas, beach chairs, and crowds were a long way off. But just ahead hidden amongst sea grape trees stood a run-down house that seemed to be out of repair for years. It appeared to be unoccupied. Curious, they went t
9、o investigate.,The front steps to the doorway of the house creaked as they carefully climbed them up, so did the porch when they stepped onto it. The dusty windows and porch railing were badly weathered and broken. The front door was half open, so they squeezed through and consciously entered. The p
10、lace was in a total mess, covered with dust, sand, dead leaves, and overturned furniture. Theyd taken, but a few steps when the door unexpectedly slammed shut behind them.,Scared, Krin and Paula were frozen to the spot. But before they could even utter something like “Oh- oh,” the windows abruptly c
11、losed, too. And if this wasnt scary enough, the stairs to the second floor cracked loudly. When a light in the back bedroom flickered, that was absolutely the final straw. Paragraph 1: “Lets get out of here, Paula!” screamed Krin. _ Paragraph 2: Out they ran, all the way back to those wonderful umbr
12、ellas, beach chairs, and crowds. _,太害怕了，不来了 再也不离开父母 父母告诫，不要再去 不再冒险 装作好像什么也没发生,做梦 父母不相信 父母相视一笑 回去找，没了,情节要完整，情感要呼应,11种结局,虚惊一场记忆犹新 鬼屋，与父亲交谈,从关键词的角度自问,创造性思维,从关键词的角度自问,段落情节要完整、情感要呼应,下划线词的分类与设问,结合段落提示谋划情节落实思维的逻辑性,思-结合续写导引，构思合理情节,“读思写”的过程指导,读,读出原文中的有效信息，为思做好铺垫和准备；,思,构思故事情节，是一个创造的过程； 既要结合读出来的信息，又要创造自己的内容；,写
13、,通过写作微技能的具体运用落实思的结果， 是对思的精准表达。,分解过程 分步描写 准确表达 精准描写 添油加醋 丰满描写,“写”的主要方法,写-运用写作微技能，表达准确信息,as the days dragged on slowly in a split second I remember my first fishing tour, as if it were but yesterday.,1.积累地道短语词块，提高语言的准确性,As I gazed at the sky, I mumbled to myself at the prices. Seeing this, I decided t
14、o do Suddenly, Krin spotted some. lying Mother sat under a big umbrella, reading a book with a bottle of lemonade in her hand.,1.积累地道短语词块，提高语言的准确性,he lowered his head the door unexpectedly slammed shut behind them I stormed out of the house. The front door was half open so they squeezed through and
15、cautiously entered. He sprang into action. From time to time, I pretended to look towards his direction, glanced over his paper and copied the answers.,1.积累地道短语词块，提高语言的准确性,1.积累地道短语词块，提高语言的准确性,with a broad smile (with) her eyes brimming with tears I continue to ring my bell happily, broadly smiling a
16、t everyone.,walk, jump, go, on foot, wander, leap, skip, march, run, move, rush, storm, struggle to his feet, head for, approach, step, slide, race, sneak, stride, stroll, limp, stumble, creep, tiptoe, parade, roam, hike, trek, stretch your legs,1.积累地道短语词块，提高语言的准确性,a neverending beach The water was
17、glistering in the morning sunlight. It was a still, sweet day of early summer.,1.积累地道短语词块，提高语言的准确性,环境描写,Had it not been for my carelessness, all this would not have happened. With great sorrow and regret, I just sat there rooted in my chair.,1.积累地道短语词块，提高语言的准确性,Heartbroken, I knew nothing could be d
18、one now. Overwhelmed with gratitude, he fell to his knees. Scared, Krin and Paula were frozen to the spot. Curious, they went to investigate.,1.积累地道短语词块，提高语言的准确性,1.积累地道短语词块，提高语言的准确性,Five family members braved the water, swimming out to rescue the boy. a stupid bell The entire rescue took over an hou
19、r, leaving everyone cold and exhausted. Exams are just around the corner. that was absolutely the final straw The money he donated was not a lot, but it was a lot to him.,1.积累地道短语词块，提高语言的准确性,2.运用多种句子结构，体现语言的丰富性,一意多译,很显然，他已经意识到了危险。 It is apparent that he has been aware of the danger. Apparently, he h
20、as been conscious of he danger. It is obvious that he has realized the danger. It is evident that he has appreciated the danger.,3.利用有效语篇连接，促成语言的连贯性,3.利用有效语篇连接，促成语言的连贯性,3.利用有效语篇连接，促成语言的连贯性,不同文体中的使用,John was waiting for the girl whose heart he knew, but whose face he didnt, the girl with the rose. Th
21、irteen months ago, in a Florida library he took a book off the shelf and found himself attracted with the notes in the side of the page blank. The soft handwriting reflected a thoughtful and insightful spirit. In front of the book, he discovered the previous owners name, Miss Hollis Maynell. With ti
22、me and effort he located her address. He wrote her a letter introducing himself and desiring her to correspond.,During the next year and one-month the two grew to know each other through the mail. A Romance was budding. John requested a photograph, but she refused. She felt that if he really cared,
23、it wouldnt matter what she looked like. Later they scheduled their first meet - 7:00 pm at Grand Central Station in New York. “Youll recognize me,” she wrote, “by the red rose Ill be wearing on my lapel.”,So at 7:00 he was in the station waiting for the girl with the red rose. A young woman in a gre
24、en suit was coming toward him, her figure long and slim and her eyes were blue as flowers. Almost uncontrollably he made one step closer to her, and just at this moment he saw a woman well past 40, wearing a red rose. Paragraph 1: The girl was walking quickly away. _ Paragraph 2: The woman smiled, “
25、I dont know what this is about, son,” _,The girl was walking quickly away. Hesitated, I was eager to step forward to follow with this beautiful girl. Though I didnt know what Hollis Maynell looked like, I guessed she should be at least have a good looking. But the fact was it was the woman well past
26、 40 that wore the red rose. Gazing at the girl walking away, I felt at a loss. I tried to persuade myself that it was shallow to focus on ones appearance more than on the spirit. With a broad smile, I approached the woman, “Dear Mrs. Hollis Maynell. May I take your time?” The woman smiled, “I dont k
27、now what this is about, son.” Confusion filling in my mind, I couldnt figure out her meaning. She continued to say, “Actually Im not the one you looking for, but the girl who wore my green suit insisted on exchanging clothes with me.” In a split second, I realized what was going on. The girl in gree
28、n turned around at the corner and walked back to me. From her, I learned we should care more about the heart instead of the appearance.,The girl was walking quickly away. But the old woman was waiting. John was shocked and suspected that the old woman was the right person he wanted to meet. It was r
29、eally an embrassing situation. John gazed at the book in his hands, thinking whether he should call her. Shortly after, John bravely get close to the old woman and said, “I am John. That rose means you are Miss Hollis Maynell, right? You look like old but I dont care.” The woman smiled, “I dont know
30、 what this is about, son.” It was a young woman with a green suit that give me the red rose.” John stood there, feeling very ashamed. To his surprise, that means the young woman who he firstly noticed was Miss Hollis Maynell. In a split second, a beautiful woman with a green suit ran to John and sai
31、d. “You success passing the test which I set on purpose. Having trust in you is right.” John lowered his head but smiled happily.,The girl was walking quickly away. John felt that he was at a complete loss. So eager was he to follow that girl. However, he was longing for the woman whose spirit truly
32、 impressed him a lot. Therefore, he went straight to the woman without hesitation. With a broad smile, he said, “Im John and you must be Miss Hollis Maynell. Im glad to meet you. May I take you to dinner.” The woman smiled, “I dont know what this is about, son.” She complained. “It is the young girl
33、 in the green suit that asked me to wear this rose. And she said if you were to invite me to dinner, I should tell you that she is waiting for you in the restaurant next to the station. Besides, she also said it was a kind of test.” An excited feeling bubbled up inside Ally. For a moment John couldnt believe it, but it was true. Overwhelmed with happiness, he rushed to the restaurant. From that we know if you really care someone, it wont matter what she looks like.,本课小结,1、语境中学习2、反复中强化3、阅读中提升4、运用中巩固,写作过程指导三步曲-读思写,读：深入解读文本,思：精心构思情节,写：准确表达信息,谢 谢,QQ：929511005,
