1、2011-2012,要点拓展 经历感受类,1 写作技巧经历感受通常要包括“ 谁？做了什么事？怎么做？结果如何？” 等，然后再谈谈本人对此次经历的看法及感受或是从这次经历中得出什么经验教训。写经历时，可借鉴原文法，可借鉴原文的结构和主题。因为写经历就是写记叙文，将记叙文的几个要素替换即可，但一定要注意主题与原文一致。,1常用句式 引出经历(过去时） 1 The story reminds me of my experience in my childhood. . 2 The story reminds me of a similar experience of my friend. 3 I a
2、lso had an unforgettable experience. 4 主题句 + I also had an unforgettable experience. It is when I was 15, 具体例子 5 A similar example jumps into my mind. 6. I can well remember that there was a time when -具体例子）.,1常用句式 感受启示1 From this experience I realize that 2 I benefit a lot from this experience and
3、realized that. 3 After reading the story, I was deeply moved and I realized that 4 Having read the story, I was lost in thought. I am aware that,仿写 以你自己或他人成长的某次经历，说明父母过度照顾子女的影响 思路： 记叙文 要素 谁： 做了什么： 怎么做： 结果怎样： 个人感受：,问题,Overparenting n. Over love v. 过渡句用的不当 语言不简洁 影响部分写得欠缺深度（很多同学结果他什么都不懂。）列举 生活中的例子,1. 这
4、样的例子不胜枚举/类似得例子一下子映入我脑海中。 2. 去年我的朋友Lily被北京一所名牌大学录取了。 3. 由于多年来一直受到父母的庇护，一切都由父母为她做。 4. 因此，当她自己处理复杂的情况时，她感到很迷茫，并且发现离开了父母的帮助，自己无法继续自己的学习。 5. 被过分溺爱孩子会剥夺孩子的锻炼机会，阻碍孩子的发展，对孩子的身心非常的不利。,在艰苦的岁月里，母亲为了让我能不饿着肚子，在周末，总是把鸡肉留给我吃，并骗我说，昨天，我不在家的时候，他们已经吃过了。后来母亲因病住院，医生告诉我，母亲是营养不良。 小时候，我很喜欢吃鱼，母亲总是把鱼肉让给我，并且告诉我说，她不喜欢吃鱼。 风雪交加的
5、雨夜，天气突然变化，母亲赶了几个小时的路来为我送衣裳。 自己生病，母亲切夜不眠，悉心照顾孩子天生少一个耳朵，孩子嫌弃母亲丑，每次开家长会都没告诉母亲，直到母亲死了，孩子帮他梳理头发，父亲才把真相（母亲移植耳朵给儿子）告诉他，这时候，他才明白母爱是多么的伟大！,读写任务The passage is about a boy who was not satisfied with the dishes made by his mother and left home. Until he saw the lunch box on his desk specially made for him by hi
6、s mother did he realized the true love of his mother.After reading the passage, I am moved deeply. Mothers love is so unselfish that we children should try to repay her with hard work instead of always trying to take something from her.The passage reminds me of an experience between my mother and me
7、 . I still remember that on a hot day when I was in Grade Six.,When I came home, my mother was busy preparing the dinner and I tried to help her. I was moving a pot of boiling soup when it was about to slip off my hand because it was too hot. Seeing this, my mother took the pot from me immediately b
8、ut she was badly hurt by the boiling soup, which left a scar on her arm a month later. Whenever I watch the scar, it reminds me of my mothers love. whenever I am lazy in studying I recall my mothers selfless love, which makes me move on.,使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事说明“互助才能共赢”的道理。,Summary 农夫与邻居分享最好的玉米种子，大家都种出了好玉米
9、。道理：合作和分享才能共赢 主题句 要点2只写cooperation 或help each other,没有提及共赢，或只写单方面提高 例子与要求不符或不懂用例子论证道理同类的例子： 学习上的科目互补，方法、技巧的分享，最后大家都取得了好成绩 村子与村子之间合作建好了水利，大家不用再争水，抢水了，大家都获的了好收成 城市与城市之间在经济，贸易方面合作，最后双方都获得了很好的经济收益。,In the passage the writer uses the story of the award winning farmer who shares his best corn seed with hi
10、s neighbors to teach us that we all can benefit when we co-operate and share with each other.Its a really instructive story, which inspires me to think more. In our daily life , we face all kinds of difficulties. Everyone needs help and only those who are ready to help can get help from others .Take
11、 global and regional cooperation for example . As we know, countries are increasingly interdependent. When they work together to solve their problems the world,becomes more stable .Trade and the economy improves and living standards for all increase. But if countries act selfishly, it will create di
12、strust , poor economic and trade relations and may even lead to unrest and war , which hurts the people of all nations. If all the countries can cooperate with each other, draw on each others strengths and work together , the world will advance greatly and all the nations will share benefits and profit from balanced development.,以你或他人的经历说明诚信的重要性。 谈谈你从中悟出的道理。（2011广州一模）,
