1、书面表达中信息的整合,太原五中 李星玲,假如你是李华，寒假去香港旅游。请写一封100 词左右的E mail给你的朋友Betty，告诉他香港的 概况，要点如下【开头和结尾已给出】：,the problems,mistakes in language;dull and plain language;not well-organized;not cohenrensive（连贯）,mistakes in language,sentence pattern,grammar,spelling,Chinglish,Punctuation,Spelling,岛屿：island 方便的：convenient,G
2、rammar,1. 时态和语态； 2. 动词的形式； 3. 词组的搭配； 4. 名词的数与数； 5. 语序问题； 6. 句型错误； 7. 其他,It have a population of 6，000,000. It called shopping heaven.,has,is called,It is situate on the southeast of China.There have a population of 6,000,000.,situated in,is,It is an important international ports.,one of the importan
3、t international ports.,There traffic isconvenient.,Traffic there,There are many people go to HongKong everyday.,going,It is 1098 square kilometers.,Chinglish,cover have an area of,It has many features.,Conclusion of mistakes,Simple and direct translation; A confusing structure; Illogical order; Chin
4、glish expressions; Improper sentence patterns;,Accurancy,如何写出好的句子？,1. 处理名词,整合信息,同位语 n， 介词短语非谓语动词定语从句,，+v,Hong Kong， situated in the southeast of China，is made up of over 200 islands and it covers 1098 km.,Hong Kong， 【as】 the holiday resort and shopping heaven，is the most popular city in Asia.,名词：独立的
5、名词作主语或者宾语，不要急于写下文，可以在后面加入同位语、定语或介词短语做进一步说明。,实战练习,1. 水立方位于北京北边，在国家体育馆旁边。2. 国家图书馆2200万册，居亚洲之首。3. Jack是一名高三学生。他非常喜欢体育。他每周去体育馆打篮球。,The Water Cube，with the National Stadium as its neighbor, is located in the north of Beijing.,The National Library has a collection of 22,000,000 copies of books, ranking fi
6、rst in Asia.,Jack, a Senior Three student, is so fond of sports that he plays basketball every week in the gym.,如何写出好的句子？,2. 处理逻辑,状语从句和表示逻辑的副词及短语 conj：because， if， though，when， as if, unless，since，before，in case, however, not only. but also. so.that. . adv: however, therefore,. phrases: as a result,
7、 on the other hand, by the way, in this case, whats more,.,Though it only covers 1098 km， it is a very crowded city with a population of 6,000,000.,Because of its convenient transportation， it has become one of important international ports.,It is not only the holiday resort but also shopping heaven
8、. Therefore， it is considered as the most popular Asian city.,实战练习,1. 我们筹集的资金并不多。它表达了我们对灾区人民的爱心。2. 书要有口袋大小，能随身携带，方便背诵， 厚度不限。（购书要求）,Although we raised a very small amount of money, it expressed our deep concern about the victims.,The book could be of pocket size, no matter how thick it should be, so
9、that I can carry it with me and recite some of the version when possible.,3. 高中学生入学后，学校一般都要组织军训，以培养学生健康的体魄和坚强的毅力。,It is becoming more and more popular for the senior students to have military training as soon as they enter senior middle school so that they can become stronger both physically and men
10、tally.,句与句之间的逻辑判断: 两个简单句之间如果能有合适的连词或过渡词进行衔接的话，会更有逻辑性。所以在写简单句的时候，不妨使用状语从句的连词连接两个句子。,如何写出好的句子？,3. 非限定性定于从句的运用,一个简单句，+非限定性定语从句。,Its transportation is very convenient，which makes it become one of important international ports.,Hong Kong is considered as the most popular Asian city， for which millions of
11、 tourists travel and shop here every year.,实战练习,1. 高中学生入学后，学校一般都要组织军训，以培养学生健康的体魄和坚强的毅力。,It is commonly seen that the senior students have military training as soon as they enter senior middle school, by which they can build a healthy body and a strong will.,2. 国家图书馆设备先进，服务优质，环境优雅，令人享受.3. 我们组织了热烈的讨论。
12、 我们交换了意见。提出了很好的建议。,The National Library provides advanced facilities, good service and pleasant atmosphere, which please us./which can be a feast for us.,We organized a heated discussion, during which we not only exchanged ideas but also put forward many good suggestions.,定语从句的使用: 当由一个事实得出一个结论或对前文进行
13、说明时，可以使用非限定性定语从句。,I went to Hong Kong during the winter holiday. Hong Kong, situated in the southeast of China, is a wonderful city. Hong Kong is made up of over 200 islands, covering 1098 square kilometers. It has a population of more than six million. With the convenient transportation, Hong Kong
14、becomes one of the most important international ports. Beautiful environment and other good conditions make Hong Kong a holiday resort. And naturally, it becomes the most popular city in Asia. Because of the fantastic shops, Hong Kong has been known as the shopping heaven all over the world. Hope yo
15、u will come to Hong Kong.,外面下着大雨。 这个人打着伞。 他努力地浇着花园里的花。 他无疑是一个不视情况变化而变化的人。,Although it is raining heavily, the man remains watering his garden, holding his umbrella, which no doubt proves that he is such a person as cannot change his mind as situations have changed.,那些失去耐心和毅力的孩子选择了放弃。 选择留下的孩子最终得到了他的收
16、获。 只要我们在困难面前不气馁，不放弃，我们就能达到目的。,The children who no longer have patience and perseverance choose to give up, while the child who chooses to remain has gained what he wants eventually, which proves that as long as we dont lose heart and give in, we can achieve our success.,这个班徽由30个心形图案 和一只看上去像平鸽的手 构成.
17、它象征着全班30位同学. 大家团结在一起，共同创建 一个和谐上进的班集体。,This class logo， consisting of thirty heart-shaped designs and a hand like a pigeon，symbolizes that when the thirty students of the class stick close together and join hands，they can set up a harmonious and advanced class.,Practical ways to help,In your daily st
18、udy: 1. build up a good vocabulary and grammar system; 2. obtain materials from your textbooks 3. exchange your writings with your classmates and learn from each other; 4. check your writings with the model writing and study any good points in it. 5. read all that are available.,Practical ways to he
19、lp,While taking an exam: 1. make sure you have enough time for writing; 2. study the requirements carefully; 3. organize the information in a proper order and prepare a rough draft; 4. put it on your answer sheet in a beautiful handwriting; 5. check by reading it again.,the standards of a good article,organization,cohenrence（连贯） and cohesion（紧凑）,richness and vividness（生动）,accurancy（准确）,Good-bye,
