1、(Successful Harvard Applicant )1 Subject: Successful at Harvard, Princeton, Dartmouth, and Stanford Hiking to Understanding Surrounded by thousands of stars, complete silence, and spectacular mountains, I stood atop New Hampshires Presidential Range awestruck by natures beauty. Immediately, I realiz
2、ed that I must dedicate my life to understanding the causes of the universes beauty. In addition, the hike taught me several valuable lessons that will allow me to increase my understanding through scientific research. Although the first few miles of the hike up Mt. Madison did not offer fantastic v
3、iews, the vistas became spectacular once I climbed above tree line. Immediately, I sensed that understanding the natural world parallels climbing a mountain. To reach my goal of total comprehension of natural phenomena, I realized that I must begin with knowledge that may be uninteresting by itself.
4、 However, this knowledge will form the foundation of an accurate view of the universe. Much like every step while hiking leads the hiker nearer the mountain peak, all knowledge leads the scientist nearer total understanding. Above tree line, the barrenness and silence of the hike taught me that indi
5、viduals must have their own direction. All hikers know that they must carry complete maps to reach their destinations; they do not allow others to hold their maps for them. Similarly, surrounded only by mountaintops, sky, and silence, I recognized the need to remain individually focused on my lifes
6、goal of understanding the physical universe. At the summit, the view of the surrounding mountain range is spectacular. The panorama offers a view of hills and smaller mountains. Some people during their lives climb many small hills. However, to have the most accurate view of the world, I must be ded
7、icated to climbing the biggest mountains I can find. Too often people simply hike across a flat valley without ascending because they content themselves with the scenery. The mountain showed me that I cannot content myself with the scenery. When night fell upon the summit, I stared at the slowly app
8、earing stars until they completely filled the night sky. Despite the windy conditions and below freezing temperatures, I could not tear myself away from the awe-inspiring beauty of the cosmos. Similarly, despite the frustration and difficulties inherent in scientific study, I cannot retreat from my
9、goal of universal understanding. When observing Saturns rising, the Milky Way Cloud, and the Perseid meteor shower, I simultaneously felt a great sense of insignificance and purpose. Obviously, earthly concerns are insignificant to the rest of the universe. However, I experienced the overriding need
10、 to understand the origins and causes of these phenomena. The hike also strengthened my resolve to climb the mountain of knowledge while still taking time to gaze at the wondrous scenery. Only then can the beauty of the universe and the study of science be purposefully united. Attaining this union i
11、s my lifelong goal.(Business School Applicant)2 Subject: Succesful NYU Stern Applicant Think about the decisions you have made in your life. Describe the following:PAST: What choices have you made that led you to your current position?PRESENT: Why is a Stern MBA necessary at this point in your life?
12、FUTURE: What is your desired position upon graduation from the Stern School?I like options, I like security, and I like power. With these wants, I knew at a very early age that I would enter business and thus I attended a college that specializes in the subject. In my first position out of school, I
13、 was hired by Dunhill Equities as a cold-caller 电话营业员. After several weeks of being hung up on by angry prospects, I decided that this career path would not lead me to success. I then moved within the firm to a position as sales assistant. While this was by no means my dream job, I learned a tremend
14、ous amount about business, and I gained useful exposure to the world of finance. Unfortunately, the company hit a period of instability, and after ten months I transferred with my boss to Coleman I was on my way. The following summer I continued to work as a sternperson, and I also fished my own tra
15、ps. I continued lobstering throughout the rest of high school and college, and it helped me finance my college education.In addition to being ambitious and motivated enough to put my heart into even mundane, low-level tasks, I am also extremely organized. This is one characteristic that has always r
16、eceived praise. I pay particular attention to detail, which I believe has contributed to my success thus far. I take pride in my work, and I look at it as a representation of myself. In my position at Sanford Bernstein as a Consultant Liaison, I market my firm to the financial consulting community.
17、Maintaining the integrity of the firm is vital and errors are disastrous. When training new group members, I stress this point most thoroughly.I work in a group that currently has six members. The group serves as a central source of information for the firm, and its success relies on an extraordinar
18、y amount of cooperation from each of us. As a senior member, I am able to contribute to the group in several ways including: training group members, controlling the quality of the groups output, managing and accurately completing multiple requests with short turnaround times, gathering and conveying
19、 information from senior investment professionals, collecting and calculating data, maintaining databases, overseeing projects aimed at making long-term improvements to the groups processes, and strengthening my own foundation of knowledge to be used as a resource. Recently, as the result of a manag
20、er leaving the firm, I have also taken on some of the managerial responsibilities for the group including prioritizing and delegating assignments.Though I am an excellent team player, in business school I would like to sharpen my managerial skills. I have found that I need to overcompensate for my “
21、soft” appearance in order to get my point across. I hope to improve my negotiating skills and to gain more experience in getting group members to carry their own weight. At the same time, I do not want to become a tyrant. To be effective, it is important for a manager to maintain the proper balance
22、of power and compassion. Only in this way, will I be able to lead a team of people to realizing the goals of a firm.4. (Optional) Please provide any additional information that you would like to bring to the attention of the Admission Committee. If you are unable to submit a recommendation from a cu
23、rrent employer, please give your reason here.To satisfy my desire for success, I must continue my education. Of the six business schools to which I am applying, the Stern School is my first choice. I am very excited about entering an MBA program that will allow me to focus on my interest in finance
24、as well as provide me with the career possibilities and exposure to resources, such as networks and learning tools, which I do not currently have. At Stern, I know that my investment of time, energy, and money will be well rewarded. At this point in my life, I believe I have great potential to gain
25、much from a business degree since I have been exposed to the business environment for the past eight and a half years. I now posses a strong foundation to build upon, and I am ready to assume the rigors and challenges of the Stern Schools MBA program.In addition to its academic program, the Stern co
26、mmunity is itself very appealing. The three undergraduate schools that I applied to were Babson, Bentley and Bryant. Babson College became my first choice as soon as I visited its quaint campus and fell in love with the friendly atmosphere and cultural diversity. From someone coming from a small fis
27、hing village in Maine, it was refreshing to be surrounded by family. Living in New York City has broadened my exposure to include a fast-paced, career-minded atmosphere. The combination of these characteristics at the Stern School will provide me with an excellent learning environment, and I hope to
28、 attend Stern for many of the same reasons I selected Babson.I have provided three recommendations. One is from my former employer, Andrew Tzanides, with whom I worked closely for two years. Another is from my current manager, Gail Landis, who joined my department in January of 1998. At that time, I
29、 also had a direct manager, Catherine Acosta. I had worked with Cathy on a daily basis since I joined Bernstein in May of 1996, and she is providing my third recommendation. Due to the lack of growth opportunities in my position at the beginning of 1998, I was seeking employment elsewhere. The discr
30、epancy between my goals and my education and work experience resulted in a very frustrating job search. I wanted to redirect my career from RFP writing to investment banking, but given my background, it was difficult. At this point, I decided that going back to school to pursue my MBA would be the m
31、ost important step I could take. In the meantime, Cathy left Bernstein and Gail assumed her management responsibilities until a replacement could be hired. Gail has now been working with my group for approximately six months. Due to your request for a recommendation from my current supervisor and due to my circumstances, I felt it necessary to include recommendations from both Cathy and Gail.