1、海外考试与中学作文 Overseas tests and Writing in Secondary Schools,Richard Wu (吴贵富) 浙江新通 e天新托福学校 http:/ work experience,Hangzhou Renhe Foreign Languange School Zhejiang Anji Yuxiang Foreign Language College Hangzhou Normal University Zhejiang Shinyway Language School (Zhejiang Shinyway Overseas Study and Ser
2、vice Centre),Rationale for the Presentation,今年的高考作文现在大学中的CET-4/CET-6A-LEVEL,Level 6,Students show further motivation to study English and a growing awareness of autonomous learning. They can: l Understand the viewpoints expressed in oral or written materials and state their own view l Effectively us
3、e oral or written language to describe personal experience l Plan, organize and carry out a variety of English learning activities with the teachers assistance l Take the initiative to exploit a range of learning resources and gain information through multiple channels l Adjust their own learning ob
4、jectives and strategies according to the results of self-assessment l Understand the cultural background to and connotations of language during communication,海外考试各位了解多少?,北美:Toefl iBT GRE G-MATSAT SLEP SSAT 英联邦: IELTS A-level,作文的评分规则,文章的结构 内容的相关性 观点的展开 语句与词汇的多变 语法的正确性,文章的结构,(Kaplan, 1966),内容的相关性不够,Th
5、e Ways of Writing Introduction,Some people propose that the economy in china will boom in this century. Do you agree or disagree?,五月时节，四处一片昂然生机。这春天给了我们无限的动力，会让人们不禁想起了“五岳归来不看山，黄山归来不看岳”的雄壮。是啊，黄山，集泰山之雄伟，华山之险峻，恒山之烟云，庐山之飞瀑，雁荡之巧石，峨嵋之秀丽于一体，尤以奇松、怪石、云海、温泉四绝闻名天下，让华夏儿女为之骄傲！想我们祖国，壮丽河山，奇域凌峰，无处不美！再看今天祖国的科技发展，更是让世
6、人刮目相看。我认为，中国这样的伟大，一定会在下个世纪成为经济强国。为什么这样说呢，我们可以看下面三个理由,题目：在你的家人中你最喜欢谁?,我最喜欢我妈妈。我最喜欢我爸爸。我最喜欢我姥姥。我最喜欢我姥爷。我最喜欢我爷爷 ,我最喜欢我妈妈。她从不打我，也从不骂我.每当我犯错误的时候，她总是耐心地给我讲道理，让我分清什么是好什么是坏。例如，有一天，我打了邻居家的小丫,她没有先责怪我，而是给我讲了小朋友之间应该怎样关心，怎样友爱。此外,她还特别关心我。每当我生病的时候，她总是整夜不睡，一直陪在我的床前看我静静入睡，还时不时摸我的额头，看是否还在发烧。而且，她还特别爱帮助别人.每当邻居家有困难时，她总是
7、想办法帮助她们。邻居的李大妈是孤寡老人，妈妈经常过去和她聊天，陪她解闷。还时不时给她送去一些好吃的。,语句/词汇的多变性和合适性,根据中文顺序或思维方式死译 语句: 经过三年的努力工作,我们将身体很累. After 3 years hard work, I want to have a relax body. (feel relaxed) 词汇: 文化 胸有成竹 老三老四 半瓶醋出事故,我们的对策_知彼知己,方能百战不殆,Your Strengths,Your Weaknesses,How to know your own writing ability-SWOT分析,Opportunitie
8、s,Threats,词汇量和词汇变化 句式的掌握情况:用复杂句进行写作 单词拼写:正确拼写较难的单词 时间控制:在规定时间内完成规定任务 移花接木能力 使用合适的段落连接词 用词是否准确 表达是否明了 评分要求是否清晰 (读者群) 写作是否容易跑题,Details in questions:,What are our weaknesses?,Good essays are the same, but poor ones are all different and have their own Weaknesses.,Weakness 1,1.lack of ideas-may result i
9、n a lot of repetitions or only providing a little informatione.g Does human activity damage or make the earth a better place to live? (issues you do not know much) Eat in a restaurant or prepare and eat at home?(issues you are very familiar but never thought about)from very specific facts to your id
10、eas read newspaper or magazines and collect information in your spare time,2.lack of good structure or organizing-full of ideas result in the poor quality to communicate your ideas,or the others will find your writing difficult to follow. Make a plan first e.g What important thing about your hometow
11、n would you change?,Weakness 2,Weakness 3,3.lack of advanced vocabulary and complicated sentences 有效地结合阅读和写作 词汇是基础; 同义转换是变通器 三个多字要记牢：多看、多读、多模仿，有用短语要背诵 缩写阅读文章或者写摘要是融阅读与写作于一体的有力手段,4.Chinese English the actual English level but learn to improve hoping to use some idioms, old sayings or proverbs.But try
12、 to memorize ,never translate,Weakness 4,Error Analysis,Richard Wu,Lexical Errors,Form Errors Meaning Errors Part of Speech Errors,Form Errors,Sometime I need to join the (an) international conference(Sometimes外形相似) Our university has some different characters. (characteristics 构词接近） The former has
13、shorter history than the later. (latter 书写相近） Both of the two university are essential to the education course of our country. (cause发音相似） They all have made a great effect to (for) their lives. (effort 拼写相象） Because I am poor in (at) speaking English, I couldnt talk directly with the specialiststo
14、understand the ideals. (ideas 前几个音节一样）,Meaning Errors,What is friendship? It seems a simple problem. (question) Then, you can make more different friends and make more business. (do) how can you realize your purpose if you do not have good spoken English? (goal) I were (was) not confident in (of) my
15、 oral English, so I said very little. (spoke) You can do more contribution (contributions) to the society. (make) Even we could not know (did not know) whether she was still living. (alive) Wulinmen Square lands in the centre of Hangzhou. (is located),Part of Speech Errors,At a time, his headmaster
16、assignment him to receive a foreign specialist. (assigned) Our nation begin(s) to emphasis on (delete) talent (talents) and intellectuals. (emphasize) What we need to know is their distinguishes. (distinctions) If everyone of us give (gives) them love and help, they could live comfortable and easy.
17、(comfortably and easily) There are many significantly different between them. (significant difference) Thus, the (delete) most families must be happiness. (happy) First, with the development of economic and society, we need to adapt ourselves to the changing environment. (economy) Through three year
18、s hard working, they can improve their ability. (hard work) it can wide your view. (widen / broaden),Syntax Errors,Verbs Nouns Adjectives Articles prepositions,Verbs,Because we had met before, we talk with each other. (talked) Different people has different aims. (have) Somebody hope to build a wide
19、r relationship with(hopes) The Olympic Games will be hold in Beijing, China in 2008. (held) If you saw him yesterday, just according to his behavior, you could feel that he must be a college student. (had seen, could have felt) By spoken English, we can understand rapidly the ideas of other people.
20、(speaking) People choose to change could enrich their experience.(Change could enrich peoples experience.),Nouns,There are many forestry university in China. (universities) Some of them want to gain more knowledges and informations. (knowledge and information) Normal University has a campus area of
21、1,300 hectares, with many advanced equipments of teaching and experiments. (equipment),Adjectives,With a good spoken English, one can gain many knowledge and information. (much) Their colors are more fresher after a long and dark night. (fresher) First, its scale is much small than Beijing University. (smaller) The most greatest people, I think is those who have such characteristics as gold. (the greatest),
