1、大致的框架条理清楚。主要内容两点。第一点为什么要选港大。第二点为什么选BEN专业。建议如下：1.在叙述为什么选港大这点上稍显啰嗦，表达意思上有部分处有点重复，条理稍嫌不清。2.如果这是你要上交的申请材料，我建议不妨在语气上稍加一点对港大的赞美和表达一下去港大读书是你一直期望的事情。3.第二点为什么选该专业这点上，写的比较明确和清晰。Im a graduate student from the Middle School Attached to Yunnan Normal University.Ive always looked forward to enter HKU for my colle
2、ge education. HKUenjoys a good reputation in the world for its liberal spirit, serious academic atmosphere and profound cultural tradition,attracts outstanding students and intellectual professors from different countries.In addition,HKU has a free and diverse enviornment which provides students mul
3、tiple choices for their future and allow them to pursue their own lifestyles that they truly desire.I am sure that I can broaden my horizon,establish my acadamic foundation and improve myself on all aspects here if I have this honor to be a member of this great school. When it comes to academic inte
4、rest,Id like to choose BEN as my major.Ive always had deep interests in creation and design.I like to find out the principles and essences of things and explore a problem until I fully understandit,and I enjoy creating,designing and fabricating objects which gives me a greatsense of achievement.More
5、 importantly,I think creation and design are the motivations for our countrys further development.As a young man with belief andaspiration,I hope I can contribute to my country with my knowledge and abilitiesin the near future.The time in university may be the most precious in ones life. Im convincedthat HKU can give me a brighter future and help me to realize my dream.
