1、Your site here,LOGO,高考冲刺,书面表达 攻略,Your site here,LOGO,各档次的给分范围和要求,书面表达满分为25分，共分5档：第5档 （2125分） 第4档 （1620分） 第3档 （11-15分） 第2档 （ 6-10分） 第1档 （ 1-5 分）,Your site here,LOGO,第5档 （2125分）,完全完成了试题规定的任务覆盖所有内容要点 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。 有效地使用了语句问的连接成分 使全文结构紧凑完全达到了预期的写作目的,Your s
2、ite here,LOGO,第4档 （1620分）,完全完成了试题规定的任务虽漏掉一两个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求 语法结构式或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误的主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致 应用简单的语句间连接成分 使全文结构紧凑,达到了预期的写作目的,Your site here,LOGO,第3档 （1115分）,基本完成了试题规定的任务虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解 应用简单语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯 整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的,Your sit
3、e here,LOGO,第2档 （610分）,未恰当完成试题规定的任务漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容 语法结构单调，词汇项目有限 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解 较少使用语句间的连接成分 内容缺少连贯性,信息未能清楚地传达给读者,Your site here,LOGO,第1档 （15分）,未完成试题规定的任务明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求 语法结构单调，词汇项目有限 较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响写作内容的理解 缺乏语句间的连接成分 内容不连贯,信息未能传达给读者,Your site here,LOGO,词汇,句型 （高
4、级）和语法多样化（较复杂）,1.覆盖了所有的要点2. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇3. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑,要点全,连接词,如何算是一篇好的文章？,Your site here,LOGO,如何在20分钟完成写作 ?,写作的步骤和顺序是至关重要的：1. 认真审题, 明确要求 2. 捕捉信息, 组织要点 3. 谴词造句, 准确表达 4. 整理成篇, 行文连贯 5. 注重开头， 写好结尾 6. 规范书写, 检查纠错,书面表达的评分依据之一就是内容要点 应逐个地完整无缺地把内容要点列出来 (一般为58个要点),建议: 2审题;10左右形成初稿;5左右反复检查;修饰润色，5左右抄
5、写。 明智之举:不把书面表达放在最后,Practice,Your site here,LOGO,审 1.审文体 2.审材料 3.审人称 4.审时态,是记叙文、说明文、议论文还是应用文？是写书信、通知、日记、还是便条？,提供材料的方式是通过文字描述还是图画或表格,写什么时间发生的事？,是写你还是写我？ 还是我们、他们？ 例如：假如你是李华， 该用什么人称？,Your site here,LOGO,分清文章的层次 先写什么？再写什么？最后？（通常分23段）,常见的使用过渡词有：递进: then(然后)， besides， furthermore (而且)，moreover (此外), whats
6、more，even ; in addition等。转折: however(然而)，on the contrary(相反)， but， after all(毕竟) ，although; in spite of ; instead等。 并列and; as well as ; also等。,注意句子与句子之间过渡要自然,可加上适当的表示并列、递进、因果、转折等关系的连词,使语言更加流畅,Your site here,LOGO,总结: finally，at last，in brief(总之)， in conclusion(最后)， in short ; in general ; generally s
7、peaking等。强调: indeed，certainly(一定)，surely(确定)，above all(尤其)等.对比: in the same way(同样地)，just as(正如)， on one hand on the other hand(一方面另一方面)等。,Your site here,LOGO,选择or; eitheror; or else; otherwise等。 原因because ; owing to; due to ;on account of ; thanks to等。 结果so ; therefore ; thus ; as a result等。 时间when
8、 ;soon after ; before; later ; first ; and then ; next ; finally ; afterwards等。 举例for example/instance; such as ; that is ; namely等,Your site here,LOGO,开头,开头宜开门见山，直奔主题。同时要对你所写的第一个句子慎之又慎，确保不出任何错误，最好能作到引人入胜 开头万能公式一：名人名言 A proverb says, “You are only young once.” It goes without saying that we cannot b
9、e young forever. As everyone knows , no one can deny that 2.开头万能公式二：数字统计 According to a recent survey, about 78.9% of the college students wanted to further their study after their graduation.,大忌生造的句子或词语来开头,Your site here,LOGO,结尾,好的结尾能起到画龙点睛的作用。结尾万能公式一：作结论 Obviously, we can draw the conclusion that
10、good manners arise from politeness and respect for others. 结尾万能公式二：提建议 Obviously, it is high time that we took some measures to solve the problem. Accordingly, I recommend that some measures be taken. Consequently, to solve the problem, some measures should be taken.,大忌结尾画蛇添足,Your site here,LOGO,议论性
11、的结尾,In the end, we reach no agreement on this point.As we all know, every coin has two sides. At the end of this discussion, we dont reach agreement between the two sides of us.In short, the students have not arrived at any agreement yet.,What do you think, can you tell me.? The discussion didnt get
12、 a conclusion. Whats your opinion?,废话,Your site here,LOGO,潇洒、漂亮的书写无形中涨了分值等级!,切忌:草书、狂草 切忌:盲目地赶时间，忽略了书写,书法不好 怎么办？,一笔一划，工工整整的书写,包括标点符号 都要 认真对待！,Your site here,LOGO,如何 让你的文章“亮”起来 ？,“亮”点: 用词 造句 段落安排,要有独到之处，要想获得高分就 应在正确表达的 基础上写出自 己的特色，写出自己的“亮”点。,Your site here,LOGO,词汇选择,使用较高级词汇,1) 这栋房子在芳草街的一栋楼上。 A: The fl
13、at is in a building on Fangcao Street. B: The flat situates in a building on Fangcao Street. 2) 在周末我们做很多作业。 A: At weekends, we have a lot of homework to do. B: At weekends, we have endless homework to do. 3) 洗澡间和厨房都很好。 A: The bathroom and the kitchen are good. B. The bathroom and the kitchen are wel
14、l-furnished.,Your site here,LOGO,4) A: I like reading while my brother likes watching television. B: I like reading while my brother enjoys watching television. 5) A: A new railway is being built in my hometown. B: A new railway is under construction in my hometown.,避免重复,Your site here,LOGO,6) 这是一套2
15、5平方米的住房，住房里面有卧室、有洗澡间、有厨房;卧室里有床、沙发、桌子和椅子等。A: Its a flat of 25 square metres. There is a bedroom in the flat. There is a bathroom and a kitchen in it, too. In the bedroom, there is a bed; there is a sofa, a desk and a chair as well. (单调、乏味 )B: Its a flat of 25 square metres, with a bedroom, a bathroom
16、 and a kitchen. In the bedroom there is a bed, a sofa, a desk and a chair. （句型多样化，长短句结合 ）,避免重复,Your site here,LOGO,结构造句,1.使用与人不同的表达方式，特别是提倡打破汉语句子结构的束缚而重组的句子更受欢迎 2. 使用一些强势句式，如强调句、感叹句、倒装句等,增强语句的表现力 3. 句式多样，复杂得体。在写作中应避免使用相同长度的相同句型，而应注意句式的变化，如长短句结合，简单句、并列句与复合句共用，还可使用简化句等；一些较复杂的结构如独立主格，分词结构等也可使用,变换句型,You
17、r site here,LOGO,1) 唐山曾在二十世纪八十年代发生过一次大地震。 A: There was a strong earthquake in Tangshan in the 1980s. (there be结构，正确） B: A terrible earthquake hit/struck Tangshan in the 1980s.（使用了terrible, hit/ strike的词汇，难能可贵）2) 你八月十五日的来信我今天早晨收到了。A: I received your letter which was written on August 15th this mornin
18、g. (多数人使用的方式)B: Your letter of August 15th reached/ got to me this morning. (与多数人使用的方式不同，简洁),变换句型,Your site here,LOGO,3) 他来了我们才回家。A: We didnt go home until he came. (一般句式)B: It was not until he came that we went home. (强调句式)4) 我们看到庄稼和蔬菜长势喜人很是高兴.A: We were glad to see crops and vegetables growing wel
19、l. (一般陈述句)B: How glad we were to see crops and vegetables growing well. (感叹句),变换句型,Your site here,LOGO,首先,在整篇文章中,避免只使用一两个句型,要灵活运用各种语法结构,使文章有声有色。,5） A: People suggest that the conference be put off. (一般)B: It is suggested that the conference be put off. (高级) 6) A: He is so kind that he can help me. B
20、: He is so kind as to help me.(高级) 7) A: When he arrives, please give me an e-mail.(一般)B: On arriving/his arrival, please give me an e-mail.(高级),变换句型,Your site here,LOGO,8) A: She walked out of the lab and many students followed her.(一般)B: Followed by many students, she walked out of the lab.(高级) 9)
21、 A: Once it is seen, it can never be forgotten.(一般)B: Once seen, it can never be forgotten.(高级) 10) A: I can achieve my goal in this way.B: Only in this way can I achieve my goal.,变换句型,Your site here,LOGO,1） A: It disappointed everybody that he didnt turn up.(一般)B: The fact that he didnt turn up dis
22、appointed everybody.(高级) 2) A: I happened to have met him.(一般)B: It happened that I had met him. (高级) 3) A: To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.(一般)B: What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things.(高级),使用从句,Your site here,LOGO,4) A: The girl is spoken highly of. H
23、er composition was well written.(一般)B: The girl whose composition was well written is spoken highly of.(高级) 5) A: I wont believe what he says.(一般)B: No matter what he says, I wont believe.(高级) 6) A: If you come back before six oclock, you can go out.(一般)B: You can go out on condition that(provided t
24、hat) you come back before six oclock.(高级) 7) A: If she doesnt agree, what shall we do?(一般)B: Supposing that she doesnt agree, what shall we do?(高级),使用从句,Your site here,LOGO,1. My Dad doesnt have enough money, so he cant buy a car. (正确，但一般)My Dad would be able to buy a car if he had enough money.2. B
25、en drove too fast on his way to Florids and had a traffic accident. (正确，但一般)If Ben hadnt driven too fast on his way to Florida, he wouldnt have had a traffic accident.,使用虚拟语气,Your site here,LOGO,PRACTICE （1）,试试审题： 根据下面所给的材料，你认为可分成几段来写？,Your site here,LOGO,1） (07-浙江）在英语课堂上，你喜欢你的老师授课时只用英语，还是英语、汉语兼用？某英
26、语杂志社就此话题邀请中学生发表看法。请你围绕“How do you prefer your English classes to be taught? In English only, or in both English and Chinese?”这个问题，参考所给要点，选择一种授课形式，写一篇英语短文。 授课形式一：只用英语优点：有助于提高听说能力等缺憾：不易听懂等结论：授课形式二：英语、汉语兼用优点：易于理解等缺憾：英语氛围不浓等结论：,Your site here,LOGO,I prefer my English classes to be taught in English only
27、. As we all know, a good learning environment is vital if we want to study English well. Classes taught in English provide students with such an environment. When English is the only language used in the classroom, students will have more opportunities to practise listening and speaking. Therefore,
28、they will be able to learn more quickly.However, there are also some problems with this teaching method. As we havent mastered enough English words, sometimes we may find it difficult to follow the teacher. Slow learner may even lose interest in English.Practice makes perfect. To learn English well
29、requires a lot of practice. Therefore, I like my English classes to be taught completely in English.,Your site here,LOGO,2）（07江苏） 2007年4月29日上午10点到11点，全国亿万学生阳光体育活动在各地大中小学校同时进行，江苏省1，100万学生积极参与了这项活动。 教育部倡导学生： 每天锻炼一小时 健康工作五十年 幸福生活一辈子 请你根据以上提示，用英语准备一份发言稿，向同学们讲述一下阳光体育活动的有关情况，并就高三学生是否需要每天花一小时锻炼，谈谈你的看法及理由。
30、注意： 发言稿应包括以上所有信息，要有适当发挥。 词数：120左右。发言稿的开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数。参考词汇：阳光体育活动a national student sports program;教育部the Ministry of Education Good afternoon, everyone, _ Thank you!,Your site here,LOGO,2） Good afternoon, everyone. On the morning of April 29, 2007, from 10:00 to 11:00, hundreds of millions of stud
31、ents from primary, middle schools and universities all over China joined in a national student sports program. Eleven million students in Jiangsu took an active part in this program. The Ministry of Education calls on students to exercise for an hour every day, in the hope that they will have good h
32、ealth to work fifty years and enjoy the whole life. Personally, I think it a good idea for us senior 3 students to have daily exercise. Although we take an hour a day for exercise, it is well worth it. Taking exercise helps us build up our body and keep a clear mind. Therefore, we can work more effi
33、ciently. Thank you! (125词),Your site here,LOGO,3） （07湖北） 假设你是某中学学生会主席李华，你校与本地一所国际学样经常举办联谊活动.你计划在重阳节组织学生到养老院去慰问老人，拟邀请国际学校的学生参加，请你根据以下内容要点给国际学样的学生会主席Tony写一封信. 要点：向老人赠送礼物（鲜花、自制贺卡）； 为老人提供服务（做清洁、陪老人聊天）； 为老人表演节目（唱歌、跳舞）. 注意：1、词数为100左右； 2、信的开关和结尾已为你写好（不计入你所写词数）； 3、已给出的信的开关和结尾不得抄入答题卡. （以下所给内容不得抄入答题卡） Dear To
34、ny， Chongyang, the traditional Chinese festival for the elderly, is coming around. We are planning to visit the Nursing Home to celebrate the special day, and we would like to invite students from your school to join us. Looking forward to your early reply. Yours, Li Hua,Your site here,LOGO,3)We hav
35、e planned several activities. When we get there，we will visit the elderly in their rooms in groups，presenting them with flowers and selfmade cards to show our respect and love. Then we will do some cleaning and washing for them with the help of the nurses.As some old people feel lonely. We may chat
36、with them about their old days, changes of our city, or anything they are interested in. We may also give them some performances: singing, dancing, and so on.I am sure we will both gain a better understanding of the elderly in China. If you have any suggestions, please let us know.,Your site here,LO
37、GO,PRACTICE （2）,Words Phrases Sentences,Your site here,LOGO,1.He was interested in English in maths .(并列) 2.Hurry up, youll miss the last bus for the school. (转折) 3. you must improve your work, Ill fire you.(选择),用适当的词填空,and,as well,or else,Either,or,Not only but also ; Either or ; and as well ; but
38、; or else,Your site here,LOGO, you should dig a hole; secondly, put a young tree init;, cover the tree with some earth and press it; and lastly, pour some water in it.,First of all,then,fourthly,firstly ; thirdly; next; finally,按顺序进行叙述,Your site here,LOGO,1.If anyone against the plan, pleaselet me k
39、now. 2.The main subjects I studied at school including Chinese, maths, English, physics, chemistry and computer. 3.When I arrived Hong Kong, my mother was there waiting me. 4.There are 50% students think concel the 7-day long holiday is wrong.,改正下列句子,50% of the students think concelling the 7-day lo
40、ng holiday is wrong.,Your site here,LOGO,变换句型,If you go through the gate, youll find the entrance to Bear Country. (一般),Go through the gate, and youll find. (高级),I got up late this morning, otherwise I could have caught the early bus. (高级),I got up late this morning. I didnt catch the early bus. (一般
41、),The more he spoke, the more excited he felt. (高级),When he spoke, he felt more and more excited. (一般),Your site here,LOGO,I wont believe his words. (一般),I wont believe what he says. (高级),No matter what he says, I wont believe.(高级),I happened to have met him. (一般),It happened that I had met him. (高级
42、),Practice,Your site here,LOGO,When he was a child, Thomson was interested in maths, and when he grew up, he was very interested in computers., Thomson in maths, and when he grew up, computers ,As a child,showed his strong interest,aroused his great curiosity.,Practice,Your site here,LOGO,There are
43、great changes that have happened here. There is a new classroom building on one side of the road. There used to be a playground on the other side of the road before. But there is a big library now. There are all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines in the library. There is a new playground in th
44、e front of the school. There are many trees in and around the school,Practice,Your site here,LOGO,Quite a few changes have taken place here. On one side of the road there is a new classroom building. On the other side, where the playground used to be, now stands another new buildingour library.In it
45、 there are all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines. The playground is now in front of the school. We have also planted a lot of trees in and around the school. I hope youll come and see it for yourself some day.,Practice,Your site here,LOGO,The more you practise, the greater progress you will make ! And the higher scores you will get!,I wish you success !,Remember:,
