1、第 1 页 共 31 页高考语文总复习一模作文汇编 1.黄浦区 2017 年已接近尾声，还记得年初你为自己定下的小目标吗？不知你是否实现了你的小目标？发一个微信朋友圈来回顾一下吧（文中请不要出现真实的校名人名） 。你的朋友圈文字内容需包括：1. 你的 2017 年度小目标；2. 你为实现年度小目标所作的努力；3. 你实现（或没有实现）年度小目标的经验总结。范文：My new years resolution for 2017 was that I should be able to communicate with foreign people in English. To achieve t
2、his goal, I had asked my English teacher for help. According to her suggestions, I made up a plan. Firstly, I started with simply reading English articles and found many pronunciation errors in my reading after listening to the video tape of its recording. Then, I tried to learn phonetics and practi
3、ce one syllable after another again and again. I started with a single word, then a phrase, a sentence, a paragraph and finally the whole passage. After 3-month practice, I was able to read an article fluently without making any mistakes in pronunciation. I felt happy. Next, I practiced my listening
4、. By listening to a passage four times, I required myself to take it down without spelling errors or any information blank. Last but not least, I installed an app called Shanbei Oral English on my phone to practice both my listening and speaking. Its like having conversations with a robot. I had to
5、understand what it said to me and answer its questions accordingly. After practicing for almost 8 months, I had my first talking session with an American teacher in our school. I was proud of myself.What I have learnt from this experience is something as a saying goes: no pain no gain. Though the pr
6、ocess of learning could be dull and tiring, its worth all the efforts after I achieved my goal. Even if I didnt, its still a valuable part of my life.阅卷作文第 2 页 共 31 页8+8+4=20The wonderful year of 2017 is drawing to an end. I remember that I set an annual goal to keep fit at the beginning of 2017, si
7、nce staying healthy is crucial to ensuring my study, thus better prepare myself for Gaokao.To achieve my goal of keeping fit, here are some efforts Ive taken throughout the year. On the very first day of 2017, I downloaded a fitness app called Keep. Following the fitness instructions the app offered
8、, I exercised every other night before I go to bed. Also, I did some research into the daily nutrition I need in order to stay healthy both physically and mentally, after which I devised a moderate dieting plan. Apart from the above, Ive invited family members and friends to join me so that we can e
9、ncourage each other and exchange fitness experience.So far, the record shown on my fitness app shows that Ive done well this year, reaching a record high of 200 training times in total. Although at times I felt like giving up because of too much study pressure and limited time, Im glad I have stuck
10、to my plan. It seems to me that anything is possible if I throw in all of my energy and passion, and most of all, perseverance. Some rules apply to study. So I hope I will keep such passion and strength to do my best in the coming 2018. （237 words）点评：1 文本结构段落清晰，符合作文题目要求。1） 第一段明确告知自己的年度小目标是什么；2） 第二段有
11、总起句，段落中有清晰的标记词 (如 also, apart from) 告知读者自己所做的努力，且努力的行为都非常具体。3） 第三段对经验的总结可以再和第二段的三个努力匹配些，a. 借助科技的力量(app)；b. 借助科学的力量（did research into the daily nutrition）; c. 组团抗击惰性。2在语言表达能力比较强的基础上，可以考虑文字的进一步精炼。是否有“废话”？字数建议不超过 200（此学生语言能力强，中等学生 160 左右即可） 。精练而准确的表达也是思维和表达功力的体现。7+8+4=19第 3 页 共 31 页Greeting from the en
12、d of 2017! Its now the time to conclude our yearly goals again. On the new years eve, I set up two goals for the year: to getter better grades and to lose weight and Im proud to announce that Ive accomplished the first one.To realize the goals, much effort has been put in throughout the year. First
13、of all, I changed my attitudes towards various subjects. Ive spent more time on them, as you might already know, and try to find my own strength and weaknesses and strived hard to overcome my weak points. In addition, Ive found my own pace of studying, which I regard as the most precious reward of t
14、his years effort. Secondly, I began to take a more active part in sports this year. I took every opportunity I have to exercise, and take sports lessons at a gym near my apartment. Though I havent lose much weight, I feel myself much healthier than ever before.To conclude how Ive made these progress
15、, here comes my years motto: no pains, no gains. No matter how hard it might be, stick to the goal and never quit, and never dream of shortcuts to success. So if you want to achieve something, just try hard, no matter what the result might be, youre surely going to benefit from the process. Good luc
16、k everyone, and I wish you a happy, successful new year in 2018! (241 words)点评：1， 有读者意识，明确知晓是在朋友圈发的年度总结，所以开头结尾很应景。2， 段落结构总体比较清晰，符合作文题目要求。1） 第一段告知了自己的两个年度目标。2） 第二段中有总体句、标记词（如：first of all, in addition） ，方便读者阅读。但总体表达都比较含糊，建议可以更加清晰化具体化（改变的行为不具体是因为目标不具体导致的） ；特别是第二点，如果学生把目标定位，今年我要参加多少节健身课，或者我要完成多少公里的跑步，那
17、么行为可以更具体，对是否可以达到自己年度目标的检测也可以更明确。3） 第三段的经验总结与之前努力的匹配度不高。如果要写 no pains, no gains，那么第二段里应该有具体的自己在遭遇瓶颈或者难以坚持的时候是如何咬牙坚持下来的。4） Good luck 建议可以另起一段。3， 文本字数偏长。第 4 页 共 31 页7+6+3=16At the beginning of this year, I have made up my mind to achieve a goal. That was I hoped that I could lose my weight. With the pa
18、ssing by, I have achieved my goal. The following are some of my conclusion of this objective.To reach my objective, I worked out a series of plans. To begin with, I designed a healthy diet menu, which excluded unhealthy foods that I was fond of before. Thats the basic of losing weight. Secondly, I w
19、ent to park or sporting places regularly to do various sports. As we all know, the more exercise you do, the more heats you will consume. Last but not least, I took an active part in every kinds of school activity which can not only help me lose weight but also enrich my life.From this experience, I
20、 conclude that once you have a goal, you should stick to every hardship so that you may reach the mountain top. The process may be full of difficulties and you are likely want to give up. Go ahead, and then you will find there is nothing can hit down you. (191 words)点评：1， 段落结构比较清晰，符合作文题目要求。2， 第二段中的标
21、记词（to begin with, secondly, last but not least）不恰当。第三个努力的行为（I took an active part in every kinds of school activity which can not only help me lose weight but also enrich my life.）的内容不恰当，部分与主题无关（如：enrich my life） 。3， 第三段的总结 too general，基本与第二段的努力行为没有关系。根据第二段的内容，经验应该是：管住嘴，迈开腿。4， 字数偏多，建议 160 左右。5+6+2=1
22、3At the end of 2017, I cant help thinking the aim what I have set about making a great profess in math before the 2017 come.Math is a terrible for me to study well. To study math well, as I firmly believe, only by practicing more, can I gain a good mark. In order to realize 第 5 页 共 31 页this aim, I g
23、et up earlier everyday so that I can have more time to do the math exercise. I ask teacher many questions about the math. My mother always encourage me to study math when it comes to the problem of math. I always feel nervous, because I think it is very difficult for me to study math well. But being
24、 encouraged by the parents and teacher I have confidence. Finally, I realized it.I want to share my experience to the students which have the same problem as me. Practice makes perfect. If we want gain a good mark we should practice more. （162 words）点评：1， 涵盖了作文题目要求的三个部分。2， 第二段的内容需要重新梳理，做了三个努力：a.每天早起
25、做数学题目；b. 有问题勤问老师；c.心理焦虑时向妈妈倾诉（要说我做了什么，而不是文中 My mother always encourage me to study math when it comes to the problem of math.） 。3， 由此，第三段的经验总结是：a. practice makes perfect；b. 多向他人求助4+4+1=9The year of 2017 will be over. I always think it is a year with my ambition. I still rember the day which is the f
26、irst of 2017. On that day I praied I could get higher scores in the test. I made my plan to get close to the top of the rank.For the sake of good marks, what I must have is a serious attitude. It was the most important things for me to insist the plan. I decided to read books of English. It was the
27、most difficult subject for me. I recited the words and vocabulary day by day. And the reading is an another problem. Because of the lack of vocabulary I couldnt understand the passage clearly. I started reading the English lessons in every morning. Thats good day for me that I could never forget.Alt
28、hough I still not get my plan, I still want to get higher score in next exam. It was my ambition, I believe I can do it next year. Even though the life is tough to me. (179 words)第 6 页 共 31 页点评：1， 结构性缺失，没有“经验总结” 。2， 第二段的内容需要重新梳理。a. 每天背多少单词；b. 每天早晨读多少时间英语；c. 每周（或每两周或每个月）读 1 本英语书。2.普陀区学校图书馆优美的学习环境和丰富的
29、文献资源为学生们综合素质的提升提供了良好的平台。为了进一步提高图书馆的服务水平，图书馆现向学生们征集建议。假如你是李华，写信给图书馆负责人对图书馆的现状进行分析，并就此提出一些实用性的改进建议。Dear Sir,In response to your collecting suggestions to further improve our school librarys service quality, I am writing to put forward my humble advice, hoping to be of some value.Our school library, wi
30、th beautiful environment and a wide range of books and reference materials, serves as a golden platform to promote students overall ability. However, there are still some problems remaining unsolved. The available seats are always tight, some vacant ones are occupied by students with their personal
31、stuff and to make things even worse, some of them do not appear in the library at all. Besides, sometimes it is noisy because the discussion area is not separated, which makes students while learning hard to concentrate. Also, the network in our lab doesnt work well that its not easy to have access
32、to it when we are collecting information online.For the above situation, I suggest an exclusive room should be appointed as a meeting room where students are allowed to discuss. Moreover, rules should be made about the usage of the seats that if one person leaves his seat over 20 minutes, the seat c
33、an be available to others. And if possible, put some fund to update our existing network.I would be so glad if my advice is adopted. I appreciate your devotion to the construction of our library and may our library be better and better.第 7 页 共 31 页Sincerely yoursLi Hua3.徐汇区俗话说“万事开头难” （All things are
34、 difficult before they are easy.） 。你是否同意这一说法？请用英语写一篇短文，内容包括：1. 你对这句俗语的理解；2. 结合生活中一个具体事例加以说明。注意：请勿透露本人真实姓名和学校名称。范文 1【上中一模最高分 20 分】As an old saying goes, “All things are difficult before they are easy.” The widespread notion reveals the truth that we are likely to encounter setbacks when we start to d
35、o something but if we face them with perseverance and determination, we will find the rest of the work easier.Personally, I am strongly in favour of the proverb and my own experience can well serve as case in point.When I was a Senior One student, I made up my mind to set up a science fiction commun
36、ity in our school.I thought it would be a piece of cake, but the first few weeks following my decision turned out tough. To my disappointment, few students showed interest in the community. Filled with the bitterness of failure, I was almost going to give up but the bottom of my heart urged me to ke
37、ep calm and go on.After weeks of struggle and every possible means tried, I managed to find several members and once we started to hold activities, more students became interested and joined our community.What can be learnt from my experience is that perseverance carries true weight in our pursuit o
38、f success. Life is never like those fairy tales and we in 第 8 页 共 31 页reality all tend to meet frustrations and setbacks in our lives. Tricky as the situation might seem in the beginning,we must always bear in mind that “Every cloud has a silver lining” and our efforts wont go in vain. Nevertheless,
39、 if we give up halfway, chances are that well never see the easiness following the difficulties and he who is easily beaten to the ground by hardship is certain to end up achieve nothing.To sum up, the saying “All things are difficult before they are easy” us a perfect reminder that things all seem
40、tough at the beginning. Faced with difficulties, we should cheer up and work with perseverance. Thus, success is bound to be within arms reach. (9+ 9 + 2) (334 words)范文 2It is said that: all things are difficult before theyre easy”, I couldnt agree with it more. Life is no plain sailing, nothing can
41、 be achieved with ease unless you have the quality of devotion and perseverance.Once I went fishing with my father. Initially, I was very excited and full of confidence, figuring Fishing, how hard can it be? You just sit there and wait for the fish to bite. Its a piece of cake. However, as you can g
42、uess, I had sat there for almost one hour, yet I got nothing. Soon I was distraught and impatient. Just when I was about to quit, my father turned around and said, “Be focused and wait.” Having nothing else to do, I did what he said. I calmed myself down and re-concentrated on the pole. Two hours la
43、ter, I gained my reward.The experience has indeed taught me something. That is all things are difficult before theyre easy. As long as you devote yourself and hang on, youll succeed.范文 3The old saying goes like “all things are difficult before they are easy,” which suggests that the hardest time one
44、 needs go through is the beginning of a task.As for me, I simply hold the opposite opinion. Personally. I believe that its always easy to make a resolution but hard to carry it out strictly. 第 9 页 共 31 页Because of the common passion at the beginning, efforts are willingly made. Nevertheless, it is p
45、erseverance that is needed to complete it.The topic naturally reminds me of the days when I struggled for physical examination, in which I need to get a high score to be addicted to my dreaming high school. I make up my mind firmly three months before the exam that I would go jogging every night and
46、 kept on doing so for one month. When the initial passion faded and the tiredness stroke me every evening. I was so eager to take a breath from the exhausted training and almost gave up the plan. It was the strong-will power that kept me going on.This unforgettable experience taught me the importanc
47、e of perseverance, which confirms me that things are especially difficult in the middle stage.范文 4As the famous saying goes “All things are different before they are easy.” From my perspective, the proverb means that were all inexperienced and might meet numerous frustrations before handling the tas
48、k well. There is no exception that we have to go through a certain period to familiarize ourselves with the practice, during which the perspective is most required.Take myself as an example, once I was assigned to deliver a speech on my English learning method. Never had I got such experience before
49、, I was totally overwhelmed by the task. Despite the shyness and lack in confidence, I know it clear that the capability of expressing oneself to the public is of great importance in future work. Therefore, I started to practice trying to keep off nervousness. I looked out for videos on TED to music, the gesture of speakers and spoke aloud before my parents. Thanks to these hardships,I managed to give a satisfying speech.One must be equipped with endurance and faithfulness during the course of exploration. Few of us are born to be genius.4.杨浦区马拉松(mar
