1、,BACK TO THE PAST CHANGE THE FUTURE,报名积极，准备不足,写作满分为15分，分5个等级：2分、5分、8分、11分、14分。 2分-条里不清，思路混乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子有错，且多数为严重错误。 5分-基本切题。表达思想不清楚，连贯性差。有较多的严重的语言错误。 8分-基本切题。有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯。语言错误较多，其中有少量的严重错误。 11分-切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。 14分-切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性较好基本上无语言错误。,3.1 写作评分标准,漂漂亮亮（14分）、清清爽爽（11分）、马马虎虎（8分）
2、、糊里糊涂（5分）、一塌糊涂（2分）。,我们目标是,清 爽 （11分）,高分要求,Online Shopping1现在网上购物已成为一种时尚 2网上购物有很多好处，但也有不少问题 3我的建议,1,2011.6,首段：3句话= 背景+事实描述+举例说明The past decade has witnessed the huge advancement of Information Technology (背景描述). And shopping through the Internet has gained great popularity among web surfers（主题事实描述）. F
3、or instance, it can be noticed that an increasing number of youngsters purchase clothes, books, electrical equipment and the like on Taobao, EBay and Alibaba.（举例法扩展段落） (或：A case in point is the Group Purchasing, which attracts thousands of customers. 举例+定语从句）,2段：问题分析4句话 = 主题句+ 危害1+危害2 +危害总结In spite
4、of the convenience and low price of this shopping, others argue that we can not turn a blind eye to its negative aspects. Firstly, they point out that the quality may not be as superior as it is described and sometimes, it is possible for customers to buy fake commodities. In addition, many customer
5、s find it troublesome to make a change when they are not satisfied. As has been noted, these do exert bad impacts.,尾段：解决措施（即我的看法）3句话 = 总说+建议+展望未来As a customer, I am convinced that effective measures should be taken to enhance it.(总说看法) To be specific, it is suggested that regulations and rules shoul
6、d be worked out to scrutinize online shop owners. (或者：Specifically, shoppers are well-advised to be alert when purchasing online.) A promising online shopping is just awaiting us if we spare no effort to do so.,POSITIVE WORD,possible,Be likely to; be apt to; chances are that,BECAUSE,Thanks to; Owing
7、 to, in that; Be attributed to,very,Extremely; Highly; dramatically enormously,IMPORTANT,critical; essential; imperative; crucial,词汇积累与替换,More,think - believe, argue, claim, insist, maintain, assert, be convinced, contendharbor the idea that,take the attitude that,From my own perspective,Embrace the
8、 stereotype that,disagree - frown on, disapprove of, object to solve - tackle, address, resolve, cope with develop - foster, cultivate, nurture advantage - merit, privilege, blessing disadvantage - demerit, defect,reason - contribute to, result in , ascribe to , attribute to, derive from,so- thus, t
9、herefore, as a result, as a consequence, consequently, not surprisingly,show - depict, describe, reveal, demonstrate Good - fantastic, adorable, amazing, incredible, magnificent, fascinating spectacular, although - in spite of , regardless of,Like-be interested in, sth appeals to sb., sth exert an f
10、ascination on sb. Pay attention to-capture ones attention Remember-bear in mind Rich-financially well-off,Everyone knows / as we all know,-Its a truth universally acknowledged that, It can never be denied, it is undeniable that It goes without saying that,例如，,For example, For instance,A good case in
11、 point is that I can think of no better example of the point than to the fact that,开拓视野,to broaden the horizon,扩大知识面,to expand ones scope of knowledge,启迪心灵,enlighten the mind,培养了强烈的责任感,cultivate a strong sense of responsibility,提高了社会能力和竞争力,promote social skills and competence,增加生活的情趣,increase the pl
12、easures of life,解除紧张和焦虑,relieve the tension and anxiety （both from the society and the schoolwork）,面临困难,be confronted with the difficulty,重视,attach much importance/significance to,经不起推敲,cant hold water,提高大众的环保意识,arouse peoples awareness of environmental protection,日益激烈的社会竞争,the increasingly fierce s
13、ocial competition,Due Attention Should Be Given to Spelling1. 如今不少学生在英语学习中不重视拼写， 2. 出现这种现象的原因是 3. 为了改变这种状况，我认为。,1,2010.6,Nowadays a lot of students dont pay due attention to spelling in English Study.There are many reasons for First, Second, Third,In my opinion, in order to change this situation, I
14、think,The past decade has witnessed the accelerated advancement of education, particularly English teaching and learning. Recently, however, it has been noticed that a large number of students fail to pay due attention to spelling in English learning, which has aroused a public concern, especially f
15、or those who have been confronted with this problem. (53 words),引出话题,The past decade has witnessed the accelerated advancement of _. And _ has gained great popularity among _, especially .Recently, _ has become a public concern, especially for those who have been confronted with this problem.（问题解决型）
16、3. It is no exaggeration that _ has become a grave problem that has captured widespread attention from all walks of life, especially among .,主题段落,reason ,There are many factors that may account for the phenomenon of _，but, from my perspective, three of them deserve our concern. To start with, _ (缘由1
17、). Furthermore, _ (缘由2). Eventually, _ (缘由3). Admittedly, they might benefit us in a short term. In the long run, unfortunately, they are likely to do us harm in more than one way（社会问题）.,2. A number of factors could account for this phenomenon, but , from my perspective, the following are the most c
18、ritical ones. 3. But everything can be divided into two. The negative aspects are also apparent. One of the important disadvantages is that _ (主题的缺陷1). To make matters worse, _ (主题的缺陷2),趋势段,1. Were the situation to continue, _would be bound to suffer a huge loss in all aspects/benefit a lot in all a
19、spects.2. If we let the situation go as it is , It would certainly exert a negative/positive effect on _.,解决段,Considering the situation, it is imperative for us to take effective measure to tackle this problem. For one thing, strict laws should be made to punish those who (do sth)_ . For another, th
20、e public should be educated (not) to _.Only in this way can we witness the ideal scene in which all the people can (enjoy their life) to the utmost/ Chinese dream, to build a moderately prosperous society and realize national rejuvenation, will come true in the near future. (81 words),In summary, re
21、garding the issue in question, it is a must to take a variety of effective and practical measures to reverse the trend. To begin with, laws and regulations should be set up to protect the environment of tourists attractions. Moreover, tourists must foster the awareness of protecting tourist attracti
22、ons and behave themselves properly. Only in this way can we make our environment cleaner and more beautiful in the long run.,Judging from the ample evidence presented, we can safely draw a conclusion that top priority should be attached to reversing the trend. To begin with, laws and regulations sho
23、uld be set up to protect the environment of tourists attractions. Moreover, tourists must foster alertness to protect tourist attractions and behave themselves properly. Only in this way can we make our environment cleaner and more beautiful in the long run.,Undoubtedly, awareness of an issue cannot
24、 be identified with actions. We are supposed to appeal to authorities concerned to undertake various publicity campaigns such as benefit commercials, handouts and seminars to put an end to star admiration. In addition, it is a must for individuals to cultivate and develop right consciousness and pra
25、ctice and avoid the adverse impact of idol worship. Only by enforcing these measures, can we effectively, efficiently, and eventually further improve the current situation and have a bright and brilliant future.,1The past decade has witnessed the accelerated advancement of Information Technology and
26、 blog has gained increasing popularity among people almost from all walks of life, especially the youngsters, even little kids. 2As is vividly revealed in the drawing, on the sofa sits the father, who is asking his daughter about her school, while the little girl, to his surprise, tells him to read
27、all about it on her blog. 3Simple as the drawing is, its intended meaning is nothing but significant and enlightening. (83 words),. 2Recently, an interesting picture has been arousing the attention of people from all walks of life. 3As is vividly and adequately revealed in the drawing, on the sofa s
28、its the father, who is asking his daughter about her school, while the little girl, to his surprise, tells him to read her blog. 4Simple as the drawing is, its intended meaning is nothing but significant and enlightening.,旅游之余,The past decade has witnessed the accelerated advancement of industry of
29、tourism. And travelling has gained great popularity among people from all walk of life, especially youngsters. 2Recently, an interesting picture has been arousing the attention of people from all walks of life. 3As is vividly and adequately revealed in the drawing, on a small boat sit two persons, w
30、ho are throwing leftovers into the water carelessly while they are enjoying their holiday. 4Simple as the drawing is, its intended meaning is nothing but significant and enlightening. (87 words),It is abundantly evident that the picture aims at drawing our attention to this undesirable phenomenon in
31、 our society: littering and destruction to the tourist attractions. There are many factors that may account for this phenomenon，but, from my perspective, two of them deserve our concern. First and foremost, I maintain the leading cause stems from the fact that the consciousness of protecting environ
32、ment is still not so strong and most people may be of the opinion that it is not a big deal to throw rubbish everywhere. In addition, the environmental management system isnt so satisfying. For instance, in some places therere few regulations or the implementation is seldom performed actually.,In su
33、mmary, regarding the issue in question, it is a must to take a variety of effective and practical measures to reverse the trend. To begin with, laws and regulations should be set up to protect the environment of tourists attractions. Moreover, tourists must foster the awareness of protecting tourist
34、 attractions and behave themselves properly. Only in this way can we make our environment cleaner and more beautiful in the long run. (72 words),Just for you,When I look back to the history, I ask why?When I look into the future, I ask why not?There is nothing too perfect to be valued by life.There is nothing too difficult to be given up by courage.- Thank you for staying with me,
