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2、 drawings above illustrate is a little flower,under the protection of the greenhouse,is in full bloom / Flourishing no matter how terrible the weather would be like .But it is not always the case,once, Of course, the opposite side of this phenomenon also exists.the beautiful flower is no longer grow
3、ing in favorable condition.In no time will the flower die,if it can not adapt to the new circumstance.Obviously, the cartoons intend to reveal the problemphenomenon-the youth lack of independence-which widely exists in our society.It is not uncommon that we graduates,when leave campus for position,h
4、ave a sense of unfamiliarity and dissatisfactory,moreover escape from the cut-throat competition of job market or low-income, high strength work.CurrentlyNowadays, young adultsthe youth of our generation who are brought up without sadnessworry and sorrow.Parents,all the time,drive their best efforts
5、 to meet the unreasonable requirement made by their only child.When we enter into school with the guidance of our teachers,we seldom independently copy with difficulties we have ever confronted.Therefore, When it comes to what impacts it would bring, in my eyes,from where I stand,it is high time tha
6、t youngstersthe youth come to realize their own shortcomings before they are completely prepared prepares to hunt for work seek for a job.In addition,our society and school should provide support and advice for them so that these green hands can adjust themselves to the multivariant environment as s
7、oon as possible.in the coming future/ in the near future/in the not far distant future 。 （不远的将来）1、 一定要多变化，比如通篇不要全部用 the youth，替换词很多，比如 the young people ; youngsters ; the youth ; young adults2、 在一些名词或者动词前面可以扩展下，加上形容词或者副词，第一能增加字数，第二能使得句子更加形象生动，比如你文中的 meet the requirement，可以改成 meet the unreasonable re
8、quirement3、 to seek for a job，这里“找工作”的表达很多，比如 apply for a job， hunt for work 。而“求职者”地道的表达多用 job hunter ，job seeker 等。再发散下，解聘怎么表达？dismiss an employee。 “雇主“employer， ”被雇佣者“背单词一定要注意发散，联想。4、 ,it is high time that 。 。 。 。 。 ，这个句型大家也可以用用，但是注意后面要跟 动词原形 do5、 in the coming future/ in the near future/in the n
9、ot far distant future 。 （不远的将来）这个用法务必掌握！一般用在作文的结尾句最后。6 drawings、cartoons、pictures、 注意几个替换7 When it comes to what impacts it would bring, in my eyes, it is high time that。 。 。 、注意这个句型，非常地道！8 drive their best efforts to do / try ones utmost to do/ do ones best endeavors 尽最大努力做某事9 In addition,或者用 addit
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