1、1高分需要避免初级词汇托福独立写作虽然不要求大家要应用多复杂，多高级的词汇，但是能拿到托福独立写作高分的考生都是尽量避免初级词汇的，下面通过五个例子来说明。1.Original: We know that sometimes success is measured by how much money you earn.Revised: It does not surprise us to discover that sometimes success is measured in terms of the money you earn.专家点评：know 是非常初级的词汇，作文中出现 I be
2、lieve that，I know that这样的表达只能体现考生写作技巧的稚嫩，用 It does not surprise us to discover that替换 We know that并没有改变原句的含义，却使全句顿时增添了亮点。2.Original: We all know that most factories would be of no use if there were not clean water supply.Revised: It goes without saying that most factories would be of no use if there
3、 were not clean water supply.2专家点评：同上例一样，know 这样的初级词汇应避免在作文中使用，It goes without saying that是一个固定结构，意思是“是不言而喻的” ，常在作文中用来引经据典或表明一个尽人皆知的道理，类似的表达还有：An old saying goes thatProverb goes thatIt is universally acknowledged thatIt is generally accepted that3.Original: Some other people think that people shoul
4、d read extensively.Revised: Another position says that people should read extensively.专家点评：同 know 一样，think 也应该尽量避免使用，修改后的句子中是用 Another position says that代替 think 提3出另一种观点，也可以用 hold a point of view，hold the opinion 这样的短语替换。4.Original: The unexpected win of the match give us confidence.Revised: The un
5、expected win of the match boost our confidence.专家点评：give 也属于英语中最初级、最基本的词汇，也是中国学生最喜欢在托福独立写作中应用的词。这个词只表示“给，给予”这个动作，不涉及动作的性质和状态，若表示增添信心，增强士气，比较地道的说法是用 boost confidence/morale，如：The change of management has boosted morale throughout the company. 管理模式的改变使整个公司上下士气倍受鼓舞。5.Original: The use of drugs has incr
6、eased greatly in the last ten years.Revised: The use of drugs has increased significantly in the last ten years.4专家点评：greatly 是一般用语，表示程度高， “很，非常” ，使用相当普遍而没有新意，在托福独立写作中应尽量避免使用这些通俗而又陈旧的词汇，应换用一些更加正式，更有说服力的词语，例如 significantly 表示达到了非常重要的或可观的程度， “重大的，可观的” ，能够具体说明药品使用方面，增长幅度巨大。significantly 还可以替换成considerably，tremendously 等，同样具有不错的表达效果。
