1、第4讲 图表&图画类作文及其他,【典例】 (2018北京高考改编)假设你是红星中学高三学生李华, 请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序, 写一篇英文周记, 记述你们上周接待外国学生, 带领他们体验中国茶文化的全过程。,【学生习作】Last week, we take the foreign students in our school to experience the authentic tea culture. It turned out to be extreme rewarding. As soon as the foreign students arrived at the tea house
2、, they impressed by the unique tea pots and tea cups. I gave their an introduction of tea culture.,In order to deliver a clear presentation, I slowly explained the traditional procedure of make tea in detail. They were absorbed in every moves of mine and they couldnt help take pictures from time to
3、time.,Next came the moment when I asked them to have a try themselves. They followed my instruction and were really immersed in charming tea culture. In the end of the activity, we took a picture to memorize the unforgettable day. And I was full of pride to spread our own culture to people in all ov
4、er the world.,【升级方案】 改正写作中的错误, 共10处。(请在习作中标注) 第一步 规避错误保基本 take改为took extreme改为extremely impressed前添were,their改为them make改为making moves改为move; take改为taking instruction改为instructions In改为At 去掉people后的in,第二步 词句靓化上档次 根据下列要求完善修改后的写作。 1. 把句和句合并为一个含定语从句的句子: _,Last week, we took the foreign students in our
5、school,to experience the authentic tea culture, which turned,out to be extremely rewarding.,2. 把句改写为含on/upon doing sth. 结构的句子: _ _,On arriving at the tea house, the foreign students were,impressed by the unique tea pots and tea cups.,3. 在句introduction之前添加两个形容词: _ 4. 把句改写为一个含过去分词作状语的句子: _ _,vivid and
6、,detailed,Absorbed in every move of mine, they couldnt help,taking pictures from time to time.,5. 用一个更高级的短语替换句中的be full of: _,swell with,【满分作文】Last week, we took the foreign students in our school to experience the authentic tea culture, which turned out to be extremely rewarding.,On arriving at the
7、 tea house, the foreign students were impressed by the unique tea pots and tea cups. I gave them a vivid and detailed introduction of tea culture.,In order to deliver a clear presentation, I slowly explained the traditional procedure of making tea in detail. Absorbed in every move of mine, they coul
8、dnt help taking pictures from time to time.,Next came the moment when I asked them to have a try themselves. They followed my instructions and were really immersed in charming tea culture. At the end of the activity, we took a picture to memorize the unforgettable day. And I swelled with pride to sp
9、read our own culture to people all over the world.,【技法点金】 1. 图表类写作结构,2. 图表类作文注意事项 (1) 图表类作文通常要求先描写数据变化, 再分析变化背后的原因, 最后要表达作者的个人看法、预测未来发展趋势或提出解决问题的方案。,(2)注意题目中的提示, 分析图表中的数据及其变化趋势, 对比分析, 寻找数据的变化规律。 (3)有明确过去时间状语, 用过去时; 无明确年份, 反映一种普遍现象或介绍情况的用现在时。,3. 漫画作文注意事项 (1)读懂画意主旨。拿到题后, 首先就要仔细地读图, 细心审阅, 包括标题文字。 (2)抓住形象特征。抓住特征, 把握本质, 就能找到写作材料, 顺利地谋篇布局。,(3)联系生活实际, 揣摩漫画的画中之话, 话外之音。展开联想和想象。联想和想象不但可以获得大量写作材料, 而且可以加深对主旨的理解。,4. 图画作文注意事项 (1)寻找出图画的中心事物, 并确定中心事物的位置。 (2)描述中心事物, 可以从动作和状态两个方面来描述。 (3)寻找中心事物周围相关的事物, 并进行简单的描述。,
