1、Part 4 Writing,写作技巧 点拨,书面表达 训练,写一篇新闻报道,写作技巧点拨, 作文实例,2017年10月9日,高二(3)班的学生志愿者Li Yue和Zhang Hua去阳光敬老院(Sunshine Nursing Home)开展志愿者活动(送水果、打扫、聊天等)。假如你是校英语报的记者,请按下列要点用英语写一则100词左右的新闻报道。1.时间、地点、人物、活动;2.老人们的反应;3.简短评论。,注意:报道的标题和署名已给出(不计入总词数)。参考词汇:volunteer志愿者;enrich使丰富 Student Volunteers Brought Sunshine to the
2、 Elderly.,By Chen Jie,School Newspaper, 题目研读,这是一篇新闻报道。正文第一句应该告知读者或听众最重要的 事实,如事件(what)、时间(when)、地点(where)、人物(who)、原因 (why)和方式(how),即“新闻六要素”。接着是文章主体,应按“时间顺序”或“逻辑顺序”写作,注意先写主要的,再写次要的。最后一句 总结全文。时态一般以过去时为主。 要点信息1.帮助老人们 help the elderly people2.把献给 present.with.3.与老人们聊天 chat with the elderly people4.因而感谢 t
3、hank.for.5.丰富某人的生活 enrich ones life, 连词成句1.他们把鲜花和水果送给老人们。They flowers and fruits.2.当他们离开时,老人们因他们的善良而感谢他们。When they left, the elderly people . .,presented the elderly with,thanked them for their,kindness, 一句多译,然后,他们坐在院子里和老人们聊天。 After that,they sat in the yard and chatted with the elderly people. Afte
4、r that,they sat in the yard and chatted with the people who were old. After that,they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people. 思考:你认为哪种表达方式最好?你的表达方式?, 连句成篇,Student Volunteers Brought Sunshine to the ElderlyOn October 9,2017,Li Yue and Zhang Hua,students from Class Three,Grade Two,went to Su
5、nshine Nursing Home to help the elderly people.As soon as they arrived there,they were warmly welcomed and they presented the elderly with flowers and fruits.Then,they started working at once,cleaning the windows and sweeping the floor.After that,they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people
6、.When they left,the elderly people thanked them for their kindness.They said it was such a beautiful day that they would remember it forever.Li Yue and Zhang Hua were very happy.What they did has brought joy to others and enriched their own lives. By Chen Jie,School Newspaper, 范文点评,本文是一篇新闻报道。条理清楚,层次
7、分明,新闻的六大要素齐全。按照“标题导语正文结语”的结构报道了整个事件,使读者一目了然。是不错的范文。主从复合句的使用体现了作者较深厚的写作功底和语言运用能力。过渡词语的运用使上下文过渡自然。较高级语法及词汇的使用使文章表达了更为丰富的内容。,假设不久前8名无锡青年沿大运河(the Grand Canal)进行了慈善行活动。以“A Charity Bicycle Trip”为题,为某中学生英文报写一篇报道,内容要点如下:1.目的:为希望工程筹款;2.时间:5月20日离开无锡,6月5日到达北京;3.简况:虽然车程漫长,路途艰辛,但是他们一路上精神高昂;在很多 人的帮助下,他们筹得善款5万多元;4
8、.其他:他们在活动结束后的感受。,书面表达训练,注意: 1.报道须包括所给要点,要求语句通顺,意思连贯; 2.第4要点的内容须用2至3句话展开合理想象,作适当发挥; 3.词数100左右。,One possible version:A Charity Bicycle TripNot long ago,eight young people from Wuxi made a charity bicycle trip along the Grand Canal.The purpose of their trip was to raise money for Project Hope.They left
9、 Wuxi on May 20 and arrived in Beijing on June 5.Though the ride was long and tough,they went all the way in high spirits.With the help of the people,they raised more than 50,000 yuan.After the long trip,they were tired,but they were happy.They were proud of what they had done.It is an unusual experience that they will never forget.,谢谢观赏！,
